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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Elvira, Thank you, I liked the form and I like the content. Pleae, keep it up. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is well-done, Elvira, and very shapely. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
In reference to the last line... once again, and I quote from a source I know not... "Love enters through a woman'e ears." As for the shape? I could see that, but I refuse to make comment on the numbers  Good piece of work here.P.S. Thanks for taking the time to visit my own work. Very much appreciated. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ah, yes. "I see, I see." said the blind man. I keep telling myself I've got to get my eyes checked. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very nice, it must be a challenge to get the shapes for your poetry. It definetly gives style and class to the poems. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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CastleHoward Junior Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 20 |
Perfection must be... (taking your other poems into account) a forbidding and demanding Master dressed in black whose every oh-so-English word must be obeyed, he with the countenance of Alan Rickman, perhaps? and a frequent flyer? *smiles* |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
You named your poem Perfection, Dare never dream of rejection. With prose so sweet, so fine, I know they'll last for all of time! (by the by, I may be the sick one, but 'tis not the fair form of a woman I see in the shape of your words Elvira!!!) ------------------ Where did I go wrong, I never needed this before, I need a woman, to help me feel. -Live- |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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