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I wana go to nana's house

mannie
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 3
shawnee, ks

0 posted 1999-07-17 07:47 PM

I want to go to Nana's house. My nana make me laugh.

She reads to me and sings to me and make's me take a bath.

My nana is so cudly, so soft and nice and round. I alway gives her lots of hugs, but my arms won't go around.

Sometimes she take me to the park and somedays we just go for walks. I love to spend time with her and listen to her talk. I love my Nana

[This message has been edited by mannie (edited 07-17-99).]

Ohme
Senior Member

since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

1 posted 1999-07-17 08:23 PM

I followed the meter of the first 2 lines easily. However there was a change in the meter of the following lines that made it more dificult for me to follow. Over all
Very nice. Everyone should have a Nanna.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 1999-07-17 08:26 PM

God, I hope you aren't a pilot (your profile listed airline as your profession)!

Misspelled words detract from poetry, so if I were you, I'd fix those.

Do you read your poem out loud before you post, that would help with the rhythm/meter.

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