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Open Poetry #1

My next Submission.....

Newguy
Junior Member

since 1999-06-27

Posts 36
Moultrie, GA, USA

0 posted 1999-07-12 10:46 AM

Visions

I had a vision of the past
What did I see?
Mistakes, pain, regret
But like the knife that shears
the skin for treatment,
I saw it's help, its good.

I saw a vision of the present
What did I see?
A lonely soul caught in a world
of chaotic upheaval.
I see a floursecent star in a dark sky.

I saw a vision of the future
What did I see?
A bird of peace, challenging
the hurricane of corruptness.
I see a casualty of war.

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

1 posted 1999-07-12 10:48 AM

I like this Newguy! It's deep... Keep up the good work!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

2 posted 1999-07-12 10:59 AM

Nice work!!

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I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say.
DreamEvil©

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

3 posted 1999-07-14 11:21 AM

i think i get the underlying meaning i always been bit lunkhead but either way i love this poem

blueloon
Member

since 1999-07-07

Posts 161
NY

4 posted 1999-07-14 11:30 AM

I really liked this. The poem read fast and kept it's point strong! Welcome, Newguy!
blueloon

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