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Open Poetry #1

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orpheus
Junior Member

since 1999-07-10

Posts 30
Portugal

0 posted 1999-07-10 11:38 PM

Sometimes I'm cold
No smiles, no tears, no sound
Cold and alone in the dark in this corner
Darker than you
Darker in you

And you are smiling
And you are dancing
And you are throwing kisses like roses
And you are cutting cutting me deep

I am here, bleeding still

What you want is what you burn is what I feel
To feel is to lose
And I have felt you way too much

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

1 posted 1999-07-11 12:34 PM

Excellent! This is the first poem of yours I've read and will find the others to read more! So sad.....

breatheyou
New Member

since 1999-07-11

Posts 2

2 posted 1999-07-11 03:09 AM

I've felt so incredibly touched by your passionate sad sad poem...

eurydice
New Member

since 1999-07-11

Posts 2
Ireland

3 posted 1999-07-11 03:37 AM

I guess only someone who had really loved can write a poem with such pain and beauty. I liked it very much.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 1999-07-11 08:58 AM

Excellent poem...I was told once that a poet had to fall in or out of love to write... SOmetimes it seems so. This poem is a wonderful expression of loss displayed so perfectly. The flow in this really works. Thanks for sharing.

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