Open Poetry #1 |
Holding Back |
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Holding Back I will never again give myself wholly to another even as I lay, languishing in your arms our bodies still damp with sweat naked, as the sun rises in the red morning sky part of me will always hold back Yes, those three words may pass my lips like the sighs that passed over them moments and hours before when I cried out your name in ecstasy and I may even mean what I say, when I say them but there will always be a part of me holding back for to give you all of me would be to lose a part of myself Yes, perhaps someday as we drink tequila on a sandy beach in Mexico, watching the sky turn from blue to orange beneath the setting sun I will tell you all of this and more and maybe I will be surprised to find that you too are holding back And as we reach the bottom of the bottle drinking to where only the worm remains when everything we've wanted to say, has been said 'till we've convinced ourselves as well as each other that we have nothing to lose by holding back just maybe, it won't be so hard to swallow ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Aly Junior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 35 |
Very good! That's sooo moving. I loved it, keep up the good work! |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
WOW! This is great work! Loved the metaphor ....in reaching the bottom of the bottle, and only the worm remaining....so powerful. Thanks, this was truly heartfelt. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Incredibly well-written. I think we all hold back a small part...it's called survival. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Balladeer, I agree with you wholeheartedly. I guess I am even more guilty of that than others at times because of past history ...trust is a hard thing to earn, and even a harder thing to give sometimes. Aly and Thursdayschild, thank you for your comments...I appreciate then. Ruth ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
I can relate. And that is a rarity. Wonderful job. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
harumppphhhhhh - I never hold back (almost). Another profound, great poem. You must have one heckuva lifetime behind you, old girl. *g* [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 07-30-99).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Long John, I was thinking of this poem after reading your second reply about Hush. I was trying to remember if I posted it our not. Thanks for your comment....and yes, I do have quite a life behind me (much stranger than fiction and if you are interested in hearing a piece of it, I'd oblidge in another format other than here...ie... e-mail) But, I also believe I have quite a future ahead of me since this "old girl" is only 36. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
owl...ask LJA how old he is before he calls you old..LOL...he forgets his age, since he acts 25 most of the time (including the times he flirts) |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady Hoot: Great piece of work here. I agree with Thursdayschild. I understand how one can feel this way, but I can't relate personally as I've never been burned so bad as to not give my all. I guess I'm in a rare and enviable position fully trusting my future and what I have in life, wife and love. A fool in love I'll always be. 1963? I'll raise my hand. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Lorelei, You would know more than I regarding LJ's flirting...smiles, and that is as it should be. I think I can guess his age without asking. I am merely a poet hoping to be as lucky as you someday. Thanks for your good humor with my ramblings on. |
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Cobra Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 58 |
I swear, (oops! shouldn't swear you know ) I love your poetry! Every single poem that you write is magnificent. No, I'm not over doing it. You know, I try to say nice things about every poem. With your writing, it's not hard! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
whew.... another disaster averted, Though I had slipped and flirted, With a Hootessa who caught my eye, Right in front of my Lorelei. She's only 36 today, In her prime in a womanly way, While I am almost old enough, To be her dad (from free love). And so, you see, lil Lorelei, She really didn't catch my eye. I was winking at just a child, My inhibitions? Running wild? I hardly think I will stray, From the gal who makes me say, "I love you more than a moment past. I love you even more than that!" |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Long John and Lorelei...you two seem like a very happy couple, ah, could I ever be so fortunate....someday maybe. God Bless you both |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Cobra...I'm blushing here....thank you so very much for your kind words. Ruth |
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