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Alwye
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In the space between moments

0 posted 1999-07-07 01:14 AM


A balmy breeze drifts upon the shores of her tender mind,
And a lonely heart wanders to a lush, tropical land.
She waits so patiently, for she knows its only a matter of time,
Before her feet will touch the beach's crystal sands.

Through the mists of blinding pain she seeks him,
The love of her life fate had so cruelly taken.
Compared to his shining light, all other love seemed dim,
Only a strangled shadow compared to the fiery passion there had been.

The doctors shuffle around her, their eyes filled with worry,
But they reassure her with kind words that she will survive.
Her broken family mourns, everything around her is blaring, hurried,
She knows that all she sees and feels is a fabricated lie.

Through the haze of drug she glimpses her elusive love again,
As her mind flits between earth and a cherished fantasy.
Through his cobalt gaze she sees the greatest of all men,
Her long lost love wading in the eternal aqua seas.

Her family begs her to hold on, to fight to remain,
But her heart drifts closer to her once forbidden love.
For it is her time to dance on Heaven's shores, free of earthy pain,
To bask in a blissful eternity, cradled in the loving skies above.

He reaches out his hand, bridging the gap between heaven and earth,
And she falls into his arms, knowing she has found love at last.
Her feet now fall upon love's sandy, warmth filled turf,
And now she has all eternity to relive a love that too quickly passed.

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*Krista Knutson*

© Copyright 1999 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
sea_of_okc
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1 posted 1999-07-07 12:09 PM


Beautiful Alwye, thanks for sharing. It is my hope that true love does indeed endure beyond this lifetime
Sunshine
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2 posted 1999-07-07 12:13 PM


Very good.

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Sunshine

Words will always express our feelings true.
KRJ



Dusk Treader
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3 posted 1999-07-24 12:35 PM


A wonderful poem, touching!

PS What is it with you and cobalt eyes?

Alwye
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In the space between moments
4 posted 1999-07-24 12:48 PM


Thank you all very much.

sea_of_okc- I am with you on that hope.

Dusk- I like the word cobalt, and plus, a certian someone (known as Corran in our story) has bluish eyes, ya know...::smiles::

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter

Dusk Treader
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5 posted 1999-07-25 02:47 AM


You and that certain someone, sheesh...
poetFemmeFatale
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6 posted 1999-07-25 06:22 PM


I love the ocean so of course I love any poem that is written about it, and yours is absolutely fantastic. I love your choice of words & thoughts...they made this piece what it is...a journey of beauty....Keep writing!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


Alwye
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In the space between moments
7 posted 1999-07-25 09:18 PM


Thank you so much, poetFemmeFatale. I hope I will actually get to see the ocean someday.

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter

Poet deVine
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8 posted 1999-07-25 09:42 PM


For one so young, your talent is amazing. May I suggest that you begin to put together your poetry for publication!? Whatever happens in life, don't let go of your poetry!
Alwye
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In the space between moments
9 posted 1999-07-25 09:45 PM


Funny you bring that up, DeVine, for I have talked with someone about publication. Here's hopin!! And no, I never entend to let go of my poetry. Like just about everyone else here, I would think, its my passion. Thank you for your words. They are greatly appreciated.

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter

Micah
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10 posted 1999-07-26 01:11 AM


WOW! Great combinations ocean, love, and endearing passion that brought me to a feeling of confidence. Great job...

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Micah Senter

Alwye
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In the space between moments
11 posted 1999-07-26 07:16 PM


I thank you very much, Micah.

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter

Ruby dagger
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12 posted 1999-08-02 10:56 PM


I love how you use the ocean to be a part of Heaven, (still think it's crasy that you have never seen an ocean) and colbalt eyes are cool. (I've gazed into them before, hehehehe)
great poem.

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Luv ya

Kelly

No doubt, this will be a night to remember. -SHeDAISY

elvira
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13 posted 1999-08-11 05:01 AM


let's just hope we don't meet our exes in heaven as well...then again, they should be in hell, right?
angel girl
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14 posted 1999-08-11 05:13 AM


wow. this was so good. i love the ocean. i can't believe you have never seen the beauty of the ocean, and you write it so well.
Alwye
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In the space between moments
15 posted 1999-08-11 09:36 PM


Thank you so much for your kind words, my fellow poets.

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*Krista Knutson*

"Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy

sweetcollege_girl
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16 posted 2000-01-17 03:29 PM


I loved it! WOW! I hope one day i can write like that! such soul! Amazing piece of poetry you have here!

 "Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate"

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