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Heaven's Shores |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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A balmy breeze drifts upon the shores of her tender mind, And a lonely heart wanders to a lush, tropical land. She waits so patiently, for she knows its only a matter of time, Before her feet will touch the beach's crystal sands. Through the mists of blinding pain she seeks him, The love of her life fate had so cruelly taken. Compared to his shining light, all other love seemed dim, Only a strangled shadow compared to the fiery passion there had been. The doctors shuffle around her, their eyes filled with worry, But they reassure her with kind words that she will survive. Her broken family mourns, everything around her is blaring, hurried, She knows that all she sees and feels is a fabricated lie. Through the haze of drug she glimpses her elusive love again, As her mind flits between earth and a cherished fantasy. Through his cobalt gaze she sees the greatest of all men, Her long lost love wading in the eternal aqua seas. Her family begs her to hold on, to fight to remain, But her heart drifts closer to her once forbidden love. For it is her time to dance on Heaven's shores, free of earthy pain, To bask in a blissful eternity, cradled in the loving skies above. He reaches out his hand, bridging the gap between heaven and earth, And she falls into his arms, knowing she has found love at last. Her feet now fall upon love's sandy, warmth filled turf, And now she has all eternity to relive a love that too quickly passed. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Beautiful Alwye, thanks for sharing. It is my hope that true love does indeed endure beyond this lifetime |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very good. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. KRJ |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
A wonderful poem, touching! PS What is it with you and cobalt eyes? |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all very much. sea_of_okc- I am with you on that hope. Dusk- I like the word cobalt, and plus, a certian someone (known as Corran in our story) has bluish eyes, ya know...::smiles:: ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
You and that certain someone, sheesh...  |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I love the ocean so of course I love any poem that is written about it, and yours is absolutely fantastic. I love your choice of words & thoughts...they made this piece what it is...a journey of beauty....Keep writing! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you so much, poetFemmeFatale. I hope I will actually get to see the ocean someday. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
For one so young, your talent is amazing. May I suggest that you begin to put together your poetry for publication!? Whatever happens in life, don't let go of your poetry! |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Funny you bring that up, DeVine, for I have talked with someone about publication. Here's hopin!! And no, I never entend to let go of my poetry. Like just about everyone else here, I would think, its my passion. Thank you for your words. They are greatly appreciated. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter |
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Micah New Member
since 1999-07-10
Posts 9Gainesville, TX U.S. |
WOW! Great combinations ocean, love, and endearing passion that brought me to a feeling of confidence. Great job... ------------------ Micah Senter |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I thank you very much, Micah. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter |
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Ruby dagger Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 76Wyoming, MN, U.S.A |
I love how you use the ocean to be a part of Heaven, (still think it's crasy that you have never seen an ocean) and colbalt eyes are cool. (I've gazed into them before, hehehehe) great poem.  ------------------ Luv ya Kelly No doubt, this will be a night to remember. -SHeDAISY |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
let's just hope we don't meet our exes in heaven as well...then again, they should be in hell, right?  |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
wow. this was so good. i love the ocean. i can't believe you have never seen the beauty of the ocean, and you write it so well. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you so much for your kind words, my fellow poets. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
I loved it! WOW! I hope one day i can write like that! such soul! Amazing piece of poetry you have here! "Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate" |
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