They Should Invent Smokeless Cigarettes....

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Open Poetry #1

They Should Invent Smokeless Cigarettes....

Alain DeLaCendres
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since 1999-07-02

Posts 119
Ohio

0 posted 1999-07-06 11:30 PM

The smoke from my "stress reliever"
plays about my pen
then floats up, and up, and up...
until it's gone-
just like you.

Sometimes the white smoke
plays tricks with me
(or maybe it's just my imagination)
and forms little images of you
that smile at me-then just disappear.

If this keeps up
I won't be able
to call them "stress relievers"
much longer-
soon I'll be calling them "reminders".

I have to quit.........

2:32am / 7-5-99

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Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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1 posted 1999-07-06 11:33 PM

Very, very clever and imaginative to create a poem from that thought. Nicely done!

thursdayschild
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since 1999-07-01

Posts 169
Houston, Tx.

2 posted 1999-07-07 12:19 PM

Love this analogy! It's so true, a lost love
is like a cigarette...the burning, then the smoke, and (yuck) ash.... Great poem!

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

3 posted 1999-07-07 08:12 AM

Bravo! Loved it!

Sunshine

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4 posted 1999-07-07 03:59 PM

Well done Alain.

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Sunshine

Words will always express our feelings true.
KRJ

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

5 posted 1999-07-07 07:09 PM

Very unique. I like the possible double meaning with the last line. Nice work.

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