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Life is a Circle |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Life is a circle - a beginning - an end At one, she sat on her potty chair At five, her life was little girl toys At ten, she thought she knew too much At fourteen, she discovered boys. At twenty, she was lost in sin At thirty, creating a new life At forty, work became her aim At fifty, no longer a wife At sixty, she began to fade At seventy, she had thinning hair At eighty, she had little time left And sat in the corner on her potty chair. |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
And it doesn't take long to go full circle...  |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
I wanna party with deVine! I have enjoyed your poems immensely, you have a very...ummmm... interesting outlook on things. Keep them coming deVine! |
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invertigo18 Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 53Prairieville, LA., USA |
The sad truth about life is stated very well in this poem. I'm very impressed. ------------------ Luke Cakalic |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
..and who said you were square? extremely accurate portrayal, deVine one. In the end we all go to pot. Very nice work. |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Another hit Ms. PdV But this one moved too fast for me And still you told it beautifully Can she go back and start at 3 (?) |
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Wolfgang Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 124Hamilton, Ont. Canada |
Got to hand it to you, you do get my little belly to go up and down a lot. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Nan - yesterday I was 5....today I'm not but I act like it sometimes... sea_of_okc - I'll send you the form you have to fill out to party with me..there's a disclaimer and a weapons clause! invertigo 19 - I would like to think we could die as we are born..with someone holding us and rocking us... Balladeer - some of us go to pot more than others....that's must be why I get up 4 times a night (don't even say it!) Fred - when do you have the time, to come up with all this rhyme? You write such lovely poetry, are you two or are you three? Wolfgang - could you send me a video?  |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Poet deVine, I'm in the cellar reading today, and came upon this poem that I felt belonged in the living room, for all the happy guests to see.  [This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 08-19-99).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I absolutely love this piece and the originality of the idea you had....! What can I possibly say to let you know just how meaningful this piece is ! You are an unbelievable writer, and your ideas are worthy of some sort of award !! Good Lawrd, keep 'em coming ! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This was brilliant. It captured one of life's many ironies with style ... but left it just vulgar enough (with the "potty chair") to keep to the "this is real life and real life sucks" theme. Ugh ... that was an awfully constructed comment ... I hope you understand what I meant better than I managed to write it. ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (When I hear the bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Full circle indeed. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
Aw jeeze had to go and make me think about that.It's scary to me. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
That is so true, how we grow, then seem to regress. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
I can only repeat Nan and Balladeer. Wonderful poem. |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
God, Ms. De, you're amazing. Like Peter though, I do not want to grow up--a potty chair indeed. |
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