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Buzzygirl
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since 1999-09-11
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St. Paul, MN USA

0 posted 1999-09-15 05:06 PM



I am tired, been up so late
because I don't want to leave you
we say goodbye, never in haste,
it's what we always do

I think my body's a bit confused
at the pace that I've been keeping
it's used to bed at half past ten
but now I'm barely sleeping

But it's okay: I'll have it this way
and if I can't sleep at your side
I'll add to night what I borrow from day
and take the fatigue in stride

People say I'm fairly glowing
I'm smiling way too much
I smile because of what I'm knowing:
your look, your kiss, your touch

Sleep is overrated anyway
how much pleasure it causes me to miss
I prefer the night to the day
for no slumber's sweeter than your kiss.

September 1999


© Copyright 1999 Buzzygirl - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 1999-09-15 05:35 PM


Nice poem, Buzzygirl, and I echo the sentiments (well, sometimes).

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."


hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 1999-09-15 08:00 PM


Nice poem and the title works well

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
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Illinois
3 posted 1999-09-15 08:59 PM


Very nice.
Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
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Southern Florida
4 posted 1999-09-15 09:07 PM


reminds me of new love....really enjoyed this Buzzygirl

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Denise
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5 posted 1999-09-15 10:28 PM


This is very sweet!

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Denise

beowulf_26
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since 1999-06-29
Posts 183

6 posted 1999-09-15 10:32 PM


A very pleasant suprise. I expected the topic to be about writing poetry. As I said, it was quite refreshing to hear about love in such a different manner. Good job.

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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 1999-09-15 11:03 PM


Buzzygirl,
Well your poem buzzed me. Nice job.

Buzzygirl
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since 1999-09-11
Posts 42
St. Paul, MN USA
8 posted 1999-09-15 11:09 PM


Well, I have to admit- I'm a bit surprised that something that I wrote at 3:00 this afternoon, with about 10 minutes to spare, is getting such positive input.

Maybe it's a good thing I didn't have that extra cup of coffee at 2:00 this afternoon.

Thanks guys! -- Buzzygirl (Jackie)

passing shadows
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9 posted 2004-04-23 01:52 PM


you must be young
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
10 posted 2007-11-11 12:32 PM


nice read

ARCTIC WIND

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