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Artur Hawkwing
Member

since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

0 posted 1999-09-14 01:11 AM

In anguish, where hope hath long departed,
and where curses follow forevermore
my tears fall deep and bitter upon the soil,
the wind blows past my face
in a lonely world where my heart is always sad;
I live a dying life within each day
as my love of the stars dies.
Once did the stars seem like heaven,
as my fingers so long ago pointed at galaxies,
my face smiled with love for all
and the lightning bugs danced in my yard,
yet that was so, so long ago;
with surpassing valour I loved everyone
and enchanted music trembled within,
and I knew no night, all was day,
as I felt love for God;
o' aching memories, how you hurt,
like fire you consume me and to ashes I fall,
never to know love again,
as the words 'I love you' are long forgotten,
forever buried in the sands of time.

wlksfarwmn
New Member

since 1999-09-08

Posts 3
neah bay,wa

1 posted 1999-09-14 02:00 AM

very sad but i liked it... you guys are so talented

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 1999-09-14 09:40 AM

Very sad but in turn beautifully written

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"This world is not conclusion.
A sequel stands beyond,
Invisable as music,
But positive as sound."
~Emily Dickinson

Artur Hawkwing
Member

since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

3 posted 1999-09-14 06:06 PM

Happy, sad... I have an idea for the "philosophy" section.. *grin*

I find myself more talented when it comes to sad poetry, so it tends to be more frequent for me to write that type. Not excluding that it sounds more musical. It means a bunch that you think I'm talented, wlksfarwmn ...

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*AH- Artur Hawkwing* Long ago in the seas of time, I heard the Aiel say something I now say to you. May you always find water and shade.

Paul Allen Lupien
Member

since 1999-09-09

Posts 114
Ferndale,Mi.USA

4 posted 1999-09-14 08:48 PM

Absolutely loved the line "as my fingers so long ago pointed at galaxies"-that is truly poetic.
I share the dissillusionment of which you write.The stars still beyond reach and seemingly now-hopelessly.Perhaps though,we are nearer them now than ever before-closer,that is,to end of a cyclical journey.
There may be nothing sadder than a hopeless romantic-except ,of course,for a hopeful one.

Paul

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 1999-09-14 09:56 PM

Absolutely poetic!

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Denise

Dragoness
Senior Member

since 1999-08-07

Posts 513

6 posted 1999-09-14 10:31 PM

So Sad....beautifully written.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

7 posted 1999-09-14 11:08 PM

Need a smile, Artur?

You can have two. Loved this piece, friend.

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

8 posted 1999-09-15 08:06 PM

'Tis really nice to see your postings again, Artur.....

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

9 posted 1999-09-15 08:33 PM

Very well written! "forever in the sands of time." Time certainly has a way of "dusting" things don't it?

Pepper
Member Elite

since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

10 posted 1999-09-15 08:40 PM

I agree with Hoot,Artur...sad but so beautifully written.....I really ejoyed the read.....

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

11 posted 1999-09-15 08:55 PM

Ah, your return is much welcomed Artur...wow, this is beautiful. A melancholy and deeply moving piece, I think. Exellent!

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*Krista Knutson*

Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller

beowulf_26
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since 1999-06-29

Posts 183

12 posted 1999-09-15 10:44 PM

This was truly beautiful poetry. I don't say that about many works either. It has a very real and calm flow to it, as if you're being brought along. Thank you for posting it.

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Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing.

Artur Hawkwing
Member

since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

13 posted 1999-09-16 10:15 AM

I am not sure what to say to you all but I appreciate the quantity and quality of responses I got, more than you can dare believe !!!!! Lupien- This is a hopeless romantic, and thank you. In this poem, I was trying to write about how I could love anything at one time, even the stars ... it was a hopeful romantic, ironicially. Changing from a hopeful romantic to a hopeless romantic might be harder than either alone. This is pure bliss.

For dsynder: I think that what truly comes from the heart can come out absolutely poetic! For Severn: I like your smiles very much. Thank you, friend.
One more, then I'm off.. Beowulf: Hearing all that about how this poem is truly beautiful tempts me to write another poem for all of u... like the quote btw.......

I appreciate the comments... and the welcomes.

MissQ
Junior Member

since 1999-09-16

Posts 12
Clarksdale, MS 38614

14 posted 1999-09-16 11:05 AM

left speechless.....

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

15 posted 2004-04-23 01:41 PM

profound indeed

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

16 posted 2007-11-11 12:13 PM

enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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