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don't go in my closet
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don't go in my closet |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
don't go in my closet the distance between he and I is so great that I can hardly see him anymore "don't go in my bathroom, I don't like your ways" I tiptoe around, not to disturb, "don't go into my closet, I have my things just so," and I ask how can this be, these feelings from my partner for life? "sshhh, don't talk, I have a headache" I retreat making the distance one step further, step by step, to the point where our love is now unreachable, my heart, my body--untouchable. but you have found the way to me, my distant love the span between you and I is negligible, miles of dirt do not change how intensely I can feel you next to me "come into my life, I will give you love" cautiously I offer my hand "talk to me, permit me inside your beautiful heart and mind?" I write, giving you entrance where no one has cared to be I open my soul for you to see word by word, thought by thought, I find you closer, until totally yielding and entirely touchable I can feel the warmth, the heat of your love, across the miles I feel your passionate embrace. ------------------ ©1999 Iloveit |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
this is a good un, liked it lots ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
An interesting approach. I've been married for over six years and still there are things that I'm still territorial about. I liked how it came together in the end and I thought this was a good title. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
thanks guys, I wrote this one a while back, but the marriage hasn't improved, we still shut each other out |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sorry to hear about the lack of improvement. I should have pointed out that the only thing I'm really territorial over is my toothbrush and my books. Best of luck on you end. And thanks for looking in on my own. |
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