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the shackles of necessity
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the shackles of necessity |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx 
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naked I stand inside my twisted mind alone within the dream I perpetuate drowned by the things I forelornly indulge my servitude, the chains that bind me as I dwell amongst the shadows of my spirit a blackend version of my former self a slave to the habit I deeply detest a victim of my own overseclusion warped by the ignorance of my naive heart I lie trapped under the ashes of my former being yet this being is not completely dead the root within still remains alive though the outside is litered with mind numbing graffiti the inside is only slightly touched by that same destructive force the destructive force that made me who I am the same force that dwells with in me like a beast within a saint the one force that dwells within the greatest fears that our mother has to offer and as this force tugs at me I have only one choice to make should I remain the tortured mass I am today or rise above these shackles and find the light of day [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 09-12-99).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"should I remain the tortured mass I am today or rise above these shackles and find the light of day" Sometimes we find we are bound only by shackles we have placed upon ourselves...but regardless, when we've gotten that low, the only place to go is up. Nicely written!! ------------------ "The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Not bad, ya NUT! |
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Justin Thyme Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 216Oz |
Back to zee top!!...  |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
I really enjoyed this one! I really like your style of writing. Thank you. Tyson |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey Des - I like this one - It's really good - but I'd expect nothing less from you - you know that..... *hugs* |
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Justin Kace Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 82Oz |
This is a wonderful poem. You seem to be quite talented, just in case you didn't know. -JK |
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pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
I am glad you are working on your self improvement and rising above your "former self". I am glad you've chosen to write about how you will no longer be "slave" to "the habit I deeply detest".... slavery to any habit can be devistating and can destroy you in mind, body and spirit. These are positive words from a deeply serious human being, clearly caught in turmoil and battling destructive tendencies. I think you need to get out more and learn to have a laugh or two with friends once in a while. Take a trip out of your normal surroundings and learn to relax a little, k? E-mail me. Maybe we can become penpals.  luv, pan |
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Justin Thyme Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 216Oz |
Did you notice that twin my brother, Justin Kace, and I look remarkably like Groucho Marx? Just wondering.... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I am proud to have looked over your shoulder while you penned this. You are truly as gifted as you are crazy. I hope your enjoying the hurrican...hehe - guess I got out of there just in time, huh? Post something new - would ya already? Michael |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
micheal - ok ok I'm working on it. fixing to have time to do it once more, but that will only last a week. I'm enlisting in the army as an intelligence officer (hopefully). I've got basic in a few weeks so I'm busy making sure everything is in order for me to go (physicals and forms and paper work and signatures on the dotted line). I'm going to get it worked in that I spend a minimuim 2 years in germany (or more correctly europe) as part of my enlistment. maybe I'll get you guys on over one year. would be nice to go and check out the country side of some of the most historic parts of the world. I'll keep in touch though. so don't worry. Nan - thanks hun. I know you don't, and I aim to please. Justin Kase and Thyme - really? most twins have the same last name and different first names. just an observation. hehe john - glad you enjoyed it. Mrs. Owl - a wonderful observation. we seldom rise above the shackles we place on ourselves because we feel that to do so would be wrong. when one shackles themselves into positions that one cannot handle then one must decide if the action to get out is wrong or the etho that placed that shackle on you is wrong. it is neither a nice decission nor an easy one. but it is one that few like to make. I enjoyed that quote though =-) pandora - perhaps the greatest thing about a writer is their ability to understand things from anothers point of view. if one can put themselves in that persons shoes with out actually being there, then they have accheived the ultimate goal of identifying with their audience in my most humble and honest opinion. |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
It is evident that you are a exeptionally introspective and intelligent individual. I've recently debated the fact with friends that the reason many people do not shine is because of the "shackles" (I use the term loosely) they place on themselves. The topic of discussion was whether people can transcend these chains. I personally believe that they do and I appreciate someone as yourself who feels the same way. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This is very insightful.....and there is no choice, from the bottom you can only rise....so smile and lift yourself out from and above the chains! |
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