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Tammy Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 90 |
This poem was born yesterday while I was watching my fiancee watch T.V...... As I sit here watching you lie on the couch My heart does that pitter-pat and simply melts There are times like these that I feel I might just burst With wanting for you, that it actually hurts You have no clue what you mean to me I'd give my life for yours happily |
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Sundance Member
since 1999-07-11
Posts 123 |
Nice! Maybe some more words on the 1st stanza. They seem not to rythm like the others. just suggestions   |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Now that's true love!! ------------------ "The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin |
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