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Richard 33
Member

since 1999-09-09

Posts 187
glen easton, wv usa

0 posted 1999-09-09 02:07 AM

when i look all i see is a screen, but that
is ok because in my mind,i see your presence.
in my heart, i feel you captivating me.
your lines of beauty show throuh with every
key that you stroke, and with every stroke,
you pull the strings of my heart.
i see sunny days & skies of blue,i see
people happy in love, i see stars shining
brightly across the night sky, and all of these things bring me to you. You are out there woman that brings me such happieness
please hear my call. please tap on my wall.
take the chance,knock on my heart's door to
a happier world beyond. dare to love,and so
it shall be. because the person that thinks
so much of you is me.

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

1 posted 1999-09-09 04:30 AM

Welcome to Passions. I know what you want to say...are you having trouble saying it. The subject is a good one. I thought the "hear my call...tap on my wall," was good. Keep working like fine wine poets improve with age (practice).

INclan

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

2 posted 1999-09-09 08:57 AM

Oh, he's not so new INclan...he just left us for awhile, and the punishment for that is......a NEW name! He's our old " y.Baker 33"......Nonetheless, we're glad to have him back!

As far as this poem goes, I think it's absolutely beautiful.....thank you so much for writing such a heartfelt piece.....I look forward to you "updating" us with more since you've been gone so long!!!

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-09-09 08:58 AM

Nicely done, thanks for posting and welcome!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

4 posted 1999-09-09 09:31 AM

I thought this was quite well done myself! Beautiful!

Richard 33
Member

since 1999-09-09

Posts 187
glen easton, wv usa

5 posted 1999-09-09 02:30 PM

Thanks for the many wonderful returns.
It feels so good to be back.

DBeth
Member

since 1999-09-09

Posts 110
providence,ky.42450

6 posted 1999-09-09 02:40 PM

It gets you right there.very good poem. alot of talent!

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