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Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

0 posted 1999-09-09 01:54 AM

They lived and loved for years,
The young maiden and her squire,
They loved through trials and tears,
They were never stuck in the mire.

They loved in secret and in shame,
They were not permitted to marry,
She was deemed to good for him,
All he seemed to do was tarry.

They met in secret on the battlements,
No matter what the season,
Stealing moments when they could,
Their love and thoughts had no reason.

But this night she had some bad news to share with her love,
The thunder roared, the lightning struck,
The wind shrieked up above,
Their love was out of luck.

She was to leave the next day,
To the far off castle of Iverness,
To marry her unknown betrothed,
A fate of lonliness.

She seemed so very different this night,
As she was lashed with wind and rain,
Her love knew right away and with fright,
She had poisoned herself in vain.

He held her tightly as her life slipped away,
He said without her he couldn't go on,
She fought him weakly only wanting to say,
That he could and would go on.

He lifted her oh so gently and held her close to his heart,
He kissed her pale lips and started walking towards the edge of the tower,
She knew then what he intended to do,
And didn't even cower.

He stood with her on the edge of the battle ment,
And kissed her one last time,
A kiss that never broke,
As he stepped off the edge, their love be heaven sent.

And now they have passed over,
Abounding with happy ever after
Their love was never understood,
But was it all in vain?

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~

[This message has been edited by Isis (edited 09-09-99).]

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

1 posted 1999-09-09 04:40 AM

Interesting poem....I like the verse. I thought it was well thought out and well written. I will pass on the subject and the outcome. Having lost loved ones(!) to suicide over a member of the opposit sex, while still in High School.....I have rather strong opinions on the subject and will refrain from further comment.

INclan

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

2 posted 1999-09-09 09:43 AM

Great story, but a sad one.

Kelly
Member

since 1999-07-03

Posts 145

3 posted 1999-09-09 11:49 AM

I like this one it has so many emotions neatly tied together.

miriam
Member

since 1999-08-26

Posts 323
glendale,ca.

4 posted 1999-09-09 12:20 PM

Beautifully written Isis. thank you for sharing.

jfreak
Member

since 1999-06-17

Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA

5 posted 1999-09-09 02:51 PM

It is so "Romeo and Juliet", Very well written of course. You did a very good job of writing this. You can tell a story very well. Hope to hear one of a little lighter though.

Jfreak

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

6 posted 1999-09-09 07:19 PM

Very romantic and tragic. Very well written too!

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Denise

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

7 posted 1999-09-09 08:07 PM

Wow, I don't know how to comment! This was an exquisite piece, and such a romanticly sad story! Oh how sad though that they had to die to be together.....or so they thought.....tragic. Beautiful form and rhyme....great job.

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

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