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Through the eyes of a child..!!
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Through the eyes of a child..!! |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Vibrating thunder, cackling lightning, Rainy days troubled my life If it rained, there was sorrow Beading tears in my weary eyes The dribbling water,gray silhouette Weighing down my desolate soul But today,in this torrent rain Before I slipped to impotent disdain, My little girl gripped my awe A miracle bolt stunned my woe She stood by the window, smiling at rain Prancing up her curly mane Little head bent on pane Fingers trailing drops of rain With sparkling eyes and smile on lips The cherub sang with swaying hips "Come back another day little Gingin wants to play" She wasn't singing to dim the rain off Rather,was humming to those zillion drops The infant face was so absorbed As if, she saw darts of red and gold..! Until today, rain was gruesome As if my soul was deaf and dumb Those eyes of innocence, two years old, Opened my vision to magnificence galore Today's rain will surpass my memories Rainy days will never give me worries..! ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautifully written. Aaah to see again through the eyes of a child. I get amazing reminders too, from my four year old. Always make the memories.......: ------------------ Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels. ~Isis~ |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
It takes a child to experience such pleasure in simple things. May we learn from this - I think it's beautiful. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Moonmoon, I am in awe over this poem of yours! I love it so much! You definitely have a talent with words! Wow!!!  ------------------ ~onevoice~ "Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris. Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior." |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
moonmoon, I love this! isn't it amazing how our children make us see the world through new eyes? my kids have so much fun when it storms. their eyes light up when the "from-under" roars and the lightning strikes. they pretend they are "ghostbusting"! "fingers trailing drops of rain"-my favorite line. i could see it! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very nice to see things in that light isn't it? ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This was very moving! Thank God, we are able to see through the eyes of a child, for as an adult our vision gets blurred! Thanks! |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Thank you one & all..Really, your comments mean a lot to me.. Sometimes, when I see kids,I feel like, until now, I was not living at all..Thank God that I was once a kid too..Weren't we all?? ..Hehe...Can't seem to remember much though..!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Terrific, moonmoon. To be able to see things through children's eyes and then write about it is very creative. No writer's block for you! |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
I love the innocent of children. WELL TOLD! GREAT READ! ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. Marianne Williamson |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
To have eyes that are young and a soul so clean that they only see the beauty this world has to offer. You did a wonderful job. My thanks for sharing this special moment in such a special way. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Little ones never cease to teach us! Very well done. I enjoyed this very much! ------------------ Denise |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Thank you Sir Balladeer..Coming from the numero uno, I consider it high praise.. I wish I could capture every moment of my lil' girl, into poetry...I am blocked all right..!!Thankyou Julie,Andrew & Dysnider...Your thoughtful comments are very much appreciated...I feel encouraged by your support.. ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
moonmoon..Simply put, this was great. Thanks for the opportunity to read it! |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
If this is your first experience of seeing thru your child's eyes... boyy do you have many more great moments to come.. Please watch for them. they go by very quickly.. watch in silence...and in awe.. and they alone will reveal to you, who you are inside. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Thank you kitty.. Redwriter,thanks for the insight..What you said is so true,we are all being reborn through the eyes of our children.. Sometimes I feel like 'we' are the infants & 'they' are the adults.! We could learn so much from them..!! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
moonmoon, very lovely.... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Thanks for the kind words Pepper.. |
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juanita Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 68Los Angeles, CA, USA |
THIS ONE I ENJOYED GREATLY! THANKS FOR SHARING. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
I love this so much...it reminds me if my friends little girl talking to the rain!!! You can write about anything can't you? More....... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
moonmoon, what a way to find appreciation! And your poem did it justice. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Thanks a lot all of you...Very much appreciated.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
pretty good write here |
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