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Betrayal |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
A lover's regret is not worth this price. Lost is the passion which electrified. No one should suffer this agony twice. A lover's regret is not worth this price. Pain is life, life is short, you will endure. No one should suffer this agony twice. Broken hearts humanity must inure. Pain is life, life is short, you will endure. The pain goes away with your final breath. Broken hearts humanity must inure. Patiently we wait for the kiss of death. The pain goes away with your final breath. Grief washes out the pain of tomorrow. Patiently we wait for the kiss of death. No one needs the pain that love will borrow. Grief washes out the pain of tomorrow. Betrayal kills the passion of today. No one needs the pain that love will borrow. The price of love I will no longer pay. Betrayal kills the passion of today. Lost is the passion which electrified. The price of love I will no longer pay. The last spark of love in my heart has died. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Pain is life, life is short, I will endure. DreamEvil© |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You continue to excel in your craft. ------------------ My karma just ran over your dogma. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you Revered Elder, though my subject matter is not the hearts and flowers kind. I appreciate the reply, it means much. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This style lends itself to your poem of betrayal. You seem to be mastering every poetic style so far. This is again, an excellent piece...you have the ability to put emotion so clearly into words. I admire that!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Sad, and yet hopeful! What expression!  |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
You're a powerful writer, Dream. Good work. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Your work is always interesting and worth reading. ------------------ Denise |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Well done, as always. You conveyed the emotion very well. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Very powerful, Dream... I enjoyed it. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Perfect! It's difficult to use this form without sounding forced, but you managed it, and put a whole world of feeling into it, too. |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
How sad.......I loved it, very nice job. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
What is it we feel when we feel nothing at all? Another great work Dream. Michael |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Dream, excellent work,expressive,I love it [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 09-05-99).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've done it again. Fine piece. |
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