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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
I open a door not knowing what lay beyond, be it pain, joy, or emptiness. Sometimes I even find death. So now when i open a door I open it slowly, cautiously and i survey the room. The only problem with this is im only able to be somewhat more careful. For once the door is opened it can never be shut or reentered. ------------------ life is short kill quick [This message has been edited by suicidal dreams (edited 09-28-1999).] |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Ok I think it was good, but i have one suggestion...... not to infringe on your style, but break up the lines a bit, especially the last one if no other. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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