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Open Poetry #2

A Short (Untitled) Poem

Soleil
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since 1999-06-12

Posts 113

0 posted 1999-09-28 10:01 PM

I willingly entangle myself
In a landscape of gnarled spruce trees
With a vain longing for heaven
And a deep chasm of strangeness.
He looks at me with half-closed eyes
But consolation today is not to be mine.
For a lifetime of emotional borrowings
Has left me all but bankrupt.
And the answer is not about meaning
Or the measure of success
But rather, where the disappointment lies
When it is contrast that paints our skies.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

1 posted 1999-09-28 10:08 PM

...a lifetime of emotional borrowings has left me all but bankrupt... Very strong words in this piece. I admire it very much.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 1999-09-28 10:14 PM

So much said with so few, but powerful words! Very well done, Soleil!

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Denise

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 1999-09-28 10:24 PM

Enjoyed this poem very much. Totally understood "a lifetime of emotional borrowings....has left me all but bankrupt."
I have turned a similar phrase in my life. "A pitcher poured from often soon stands empty." Well done.

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