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Circles in the Garden |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Circles move in the garden. The flower folds into death, seeks the ground and covers the warm earth, molding with the leaves swept from the tree onto the path, making room for the new bud. The strawberry's sunny face turns red, the sweet pea is perfumed the honey suckle sweetened as the circle moves and the end becomes the beginning. The flower nipped in the bud dies slowly, coloring the room, singing a heart, joying the dancing boy and girl, catching the girl's hair in the color that sparkles her eyes. As the sun moves into another rising, flowers open to beauty and close to death. In this fantasy of time a young girl strips the petals from the daisy of her youth and one by one drops her innocence and opens into a woman. A rose blooms into the fragrance of a boys' desire, and every breath quickens him to manhood. The flower lays tangles in the memory of years, pressed against the pages of time, it waits and grows a mamory. If a flower is plucked by some raging storm, its seeds will set another bloom, its petals will enrich the ground, and nothing will be lost or forgotten. In spring new flowers will color the hills, and from a mound of plain, brown earth life will return. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-27-1999).] |
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lenny Member
since 1999-07-11
Posts 63front royal, va. u.s.a. |
Excellent!!! Well done. I like this so much. It has that ethereal quality that seems to enable the reader to travel far above time and peer down on its smallness. Perspective on a grand scale while yet anchored in the everyday. Eloquent. I am going back to read this one again. Thank you. lenny |
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lenny Member
since 1999-07-11
Posts 63front royal, va. u.s.a. |
Please forgive my redundancy but this piece deserves a second comment. It is really outstanding!!! Your perception combined with your command and weave of the words has created quite a lovely tapestry here. I love this kind of writing. Depth. Deeper thinking. More please. I could fill up this space with many adjectives but perhaps that would only lessen and dilute my point. This is truly top notch poetry. Thank you again, and, more please. lenny ------------------ lenny |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
exquisite and I agree with lenny "This is really top notch poetry"!.....welcome to Passions and I will be looking for more of your work Martie ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I needed that Thanks so much for your comments--sometimes I write and write and think that only I am listening--- |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Tapestry is a very good description indeed! I enjoyed this one! ------------------ Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Beautiful! Welcome! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Two years passed ... and these thoughts are so applicable to today~ 'If a flower is plucked by some raging storm, its seeds will set another bloom, its petals will enrich the ground, and nothing will be lost or forgotten. In spring new flowers will color the hills, and from a mound of plain, brown earth life will return.' Hope you'll consider reposting it in Open #16. Pretty please~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And did you repost in 16? If so, I missed it...if not...now's the time.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a stunning and positive write! |
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