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Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

0 posted 1999-09-26 10:34 PM

(let us possess one world
each hath one
and is one...J.D)

You

Me

You

and I

No distance
but the distance

of space

That thunderstorm
you thrilled in
insignficant
next to the roaming
one
in me

for you
my quiet one

have
roared
so
loudly

I hear nothing
but your voice

You

Me

Separately
together

entwined
in truth

Peace
in
a
raging storm
shelters
me

as

rage
in
a
peaceful room
consumes me

My world
so incomplete
yet
so full

of you

of
only you

You
who has
so much
of me

23.9.99 KM

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

1 posted 1999-09-26 10:37 PM

Very nice Severn, like the short lines style...not one I have ever been good at but admire in others! :-)

[This message has been edited by Beki (edited 09-26-1999).]

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

2 posted 1999-09-26 10:43 PM

And how is one supposed to respond when his eyes are tearing up and the screen becomes a little blurry?
The feeling inside my heart at this moment are akin to the storm you speak of, as well as the contradiction of the peace which you also spoke of.
Ahh girl, 'tis ever such with us, the contradictions. But that is why we are so together, even though we are apart.
This one sparked a bright hope in my heart, knowing that you miss me as much as I you.
Thank you my star!

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

3 posted 1999-09-26 10:53 PM

Thankyou Beki! Short poems can be hard to write indeed sometimes!

My inspiration -You are so welcome - one day I hope I don't have to write poems such as this for you. I'll write ones saying how happy I am that we're no longer apart instead!!

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

4 posted 1999-09-26 11:22 PM

DITTO THAT!

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 1999-09-26 11:55 PM

Severn,
You surprise me with your daring do and I did enjoy the poem.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

6 posted 1999-09-27 12:11 PM

Seymour, thankyou - I don't believe in 'shy' very much!

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

7 posted 1999-09-27 06:02 AM

Isn't it amazing how love from a distance can affect one's poetry? This is a very captivating piece, Severn. Feeling I relate to well.

------------------
Michael Anderson

Loneliness isn't in being alone;
Loneliness is alone in being.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

8 posted 1999-09-27 07:29 AM

Echoes of Michael, dear friend.

------------------
Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

9 posted 1999-09-27 08:40 AM

Severn...well written and I can relate

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

10 posted 1999-09-27 06:26 PM

My poet friends: Glad and not glad you can all relate! Glad that I'm not alone in this feeling, not glad for the same reason!!!!!
One day, my friends, one day.....

Tara Simms
Senior Member

since 1999-08-12

Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA

11 posted 1999-09-27 07:23 PM

"Peace in a raging storm shelters me as
rage in a peaceful room consumes me". I love the contradiction!

------------------
It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley
Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/

RainbowGirl
Member Elite

since 1999-07-31

Posts 3023
United Kingdom

12 posted 1999-09-27 07:31 PM

Severn: Three times I've picked this up to respond to and each time I was at a loss for words...so much my heart could say ...I love the storms and the magic of sharing them...here's hoping the tempest is all it should be as you ride the storms together..

HUGS

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2001-07-10 11:49 PM

My world
so incomplete
yet
so full

of you

of
only you

You
who has
so much
of me

Goodness K I can't beleive I missed this. WOW
very beautiful indeed.

Maree

"little miss understood
little misunderstood"

~Marry me Jane~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2004-05-30 03:52 AM

beautiful

TexUS
Member

since 2003-03-20

Posts 228

15 posted 2004-08-16 11:51 PM

OH
MY
GOSH!

That was wonderful to read-so heartfelt and amazing.

Loved it!

Laoha
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 161
Nevada, USA

16 posted 2004-09-11 09:55 PM

So simple, yet so powerful! Good thing you guys dug it up. Thanks.

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