Maryanne....Villanelle for DeVine Challenge

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Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

0 posted 1999-09-25 09:24 PM

(ain't easy to put a twist on a villanelle)

Let me tell you about my Maryanne
Not at all like the shrew
Who left me for another man.

She made my life so damned grand
It nearly broke my heart in two.
Let me tell you about my Maryanne.

There were no castles made of sand,
Not like the other, so untrue,
Who left me for another man.

She considered me the only man
With whom she'd like to go Life through
Let me tell you about my Maryanne.

She thrilled me when she touched my hand
Not so the other that I rue
Who left me for another man.

What's that? You don't quite understand?
I guess you're right. I can't fool you.
Let me tell you about my Maryanne
Who left me for another man.

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

1 posted 1999-09-25 09:27 PM

Very good Balladeer! I wouldn't have recognized this type had you not said what it was. Not because of you, but because of my own ignorance. I think it's real good.

A welcome home in order?

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 1999-09-25 09:33 PM

Balladeer, I go with WhtDove, I too would not have recognized this type. I really enjoyed it, it was lovely yet sad

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Samuel Coleridge

Balladeer

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3 posted 1999-09-25 09:35 PM

Not home, but with laptop in working condition and, with the exception of tomorrow (Sunday) when I'll be traveling, I'm back on course. Looking forward to 6 days in North Carolina with nothing to do but play golf and write poetry. Toerag and DreamEvil may commence to quake with fear at any time, HEHE

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22

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Illinois

4 posted 1999-09-25 09:39 PM

LOL Balladeer, glad to hear it though. Am happy to see your post around again. Was missing you! Have a great 6 days buddy, get a hole in one eh? hehe

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

5 posted 1999-09-25 09:41 PM

This is great! Lovely! I'm jealous..I'm writing a sestina that sucks! I hate to post it, for it will be shot down in a blaze of scorn..... Have a great time! I hope North Carolina isn't too wet for you!

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

6 posted 1999-09-25 09:42 PM

lovely 'Deer....we've missed you!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

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California

7 posted 1999-09-25 09:45 PM

Ah, but you did put the nice twist on it.
Glad to see you'll be back for good soon.

Michael

Nan

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

8 posted 1999-09-25 09:47 PM

I'm smiling....

Balladeer

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

9 posted 1999-09-25 09:53 PM

Darn, I've missed you guys! You're family.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

10 posted 1999-09-25 09:57 PM

Balladeer,
Nothing wrong with this one, have a good rest and enjoy your away time. See you when you get back.

RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31

Posts 3023
United Kingdom

11 posted 1999-09-25 10:22 PM

Glad I'm not villanelle...oooops

Good to have you back sweetheart..:-))

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Denise

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12 posted 1999-09-25 10:32 PM

Very lovely. Tell me, does EXCELLENCE ever become boring?!

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Denise

RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31

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13 posted 1999-09-25 10:36 PM

Only when it's in fashion...:-))

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Balladeer

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

14 posted 1999-09-25 10:42 PM

Thank you , SY ...and Rainbow.

Denise, you are more than qualified to answer that question.

Christopher

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since 1999-08-02

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Purgatorial Incarceration

15 posted 1999-09-25 11:16 PM

Amazing Bal---ever surprising...
Safe journey...and watch out for those sheep!

[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 09-25-1999).]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

16 posted 1999-09-26 09:17 AM

Okay...I feel rather stupid at times here. I just write , you guys practice all these formats I know nothing about and do a heck of a job with them I might add.

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!

Deb Lynne
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Where blue skies meet blue ocean

17 posted 1999-09-27 07:08 AM

I like this one! We'll look after you in NC! Bring your umbrella! Have a nice vacation & enjoy our lovely mountains!

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

18 posted 1999-09-27 07:58 AM

Hey, Big Brother, much older and feeble brother....family hunh?...Well, ole' Toe ain't quakin' in fear....But I do miss your horseshit Balladeer!!! Hurry back safely!

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