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Blue
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since 1999-07-03
Posts 14
Florida

0 posted 1999-09-23 10:57 PM



that's not the look you gave me yesterday
filled with such strong love and real bravery
before I drove your sweet spirit away
and scattered your soul to the open sea
I already miss
when your eyes did not see
the curse that's my kiss
this cruelness that is me
unintentional yes
I hurt everyone still
pulled you into my mess
turned your beauty so ill
and now I only wish to restore
your trust and your faith and your love
revert to innocence of before
keep far from this fire breathing dove

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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 1999-09-24 01:02 AM


Very interesting blue... you just happened to write about one of my favorite topics...
I would like to see, if you don't mind, an expansion of this, telling of the lasting impact your guilt has on your life, and whether or not it will allow you do repeat the same actions.
Well done!
Sad, but well done.

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