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Mike
Member Elite

since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

0 posted 1999-09-21 05:34 PM

O' precious Rose, when I gaze upon thy splendor,
As eyes espy, beauty of thy bloom resplendent,
I cede control; unto thee mine heart surrender,
Forevermore, enslaved to thy love transcendent.
When thou doth speak, from forth thy lips, love's madrigal,
From forth thy tongue, pour words that flow as honeyed mead;
Upon my ears, doth fall Erato's call,
And in response, to thee eternal love decreed.
Thy tender touch, as soft as glow of Luna's light,
I feel thy satin kiss upon my weathered brow,
Enraptured by thy silken charms, I yearn the night,
To thee fair Rose, my everlasting love avow.
Thou love doth transport me to far side of the wind,
O' precious Rose, my love to thee doth time transcend.

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 09-21-1999).]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

1 posted 1999-09-21 08:01 PM

Absolutely Beautiful Mike....very nicely written and extreamly romantic.

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

Julie
Senior Member

since 1999-08-20

Posts 739
Houston, TX

2 posted 1999-09-21 08:04 PM

Perfect! I hope you have someone special
to send it to...she would love it.

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Julie
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..."to thine own self be true."
>William Shakespeare

Elizabeth

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Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

3 posted 1999-09-21 08:10 PM

Exquisite. I love it, Mike.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

4 posted 1999-09-21 10:15 PM

Nicely done, Mike. I am by nature not a fan of archaic language used in modern poetry but at least your voice was consistent throughout. I especially liked the line:
"I feel thy satin kiss upon my weathered brow," I look forward to reading more by you :-)

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

5 posted 1999-09-22 09:56 AM

I love the poem! Love the words, love the style....It's nice to 'read' you again! This kind of poetry is hard to write but you've done a superb job!

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