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Brother Cain |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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BROTHER CAIN Brother Cain, where does thou hide, Am I to die in thy shadows? I am slain, death by my bride, Please tell me why ‘fore thy goes. I heed your blow, passed in vain, Mother, attuned, ever to weep. I bleed but know not your pain, My brother - your wound must run deep. Darkness creeps across my vision, In your waste of humanity. Canst thou sleep with your decision? Does thou taste the blood of me? Leave me dead, silenced forever, Now, but the haunt of memory. In thy head, O' will I ever, Abel, be the taunt of thee. Live an outcast, in thy shame, I will ever be the sleeper. ‘Til sleeps at last thy branded name, I Will be my brother's keeper. [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-20-1999).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow, Michael....all I can say is wow....superbly written, and I'm sure "he" will be grateful and in awe at what you've written here.....I'm not sure about the mood you wanted to portray...I sensed love, anguish, solitude, sadness...on and on. ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marvelous. Well done, Sir. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Extreamly well written Michael.......you've out did yourself!! ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
There's the Michael we know and love...  |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
extraordinary.... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
I appreciated this poem Michael.. I feel that I read the right message, tell me if I am wrong. But do you not speak of the Cain banished to Nod? I found you poem to be interesting.. I am not sure that everyone knows the story. It was very good.. |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Makes me sad reading this. If this is indeed the Cain banished after slewing his brother, then I had no choice but to imagine how Abel felt while reading this, because Abel didn't seem to know the covetousness which bore a seed in Cain's blood. I loved this one, as I love all your poems. You know well enough how deep your writings impact others, so I will refrain from saying the same here for me, except it's true. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Indeed, Lucie, you are right. When asked where his brother was by God, Cain responded "Am I my brother's keeper?" God heard Abel's blood crying from the earth and cursed Cain and banished him to Nod, (A land east of Eden). This poem was meant to reflect how Cain in killing his brother (presumed over jealousy) would never rise above his slain brother's memory, living in shame, banished by God. Abel, in essence, becomes the keeper of Cain for all his remaining days. Artur, thank you for the kind words. Indeed, I was trying to convey the pain and confusion of Abel in this scenario. [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-20-1999).] |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Its funny.. tis not cain who interests me so much as Lilith.. Do you know of her? |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Would that be who Cain took for a wife? |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Darkly done! Truly a delight to my heart. Liltih was Adam's first wife and Queen of the Succubi. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
a fallen angel .. by choice [This message has been edited by Lucie (edited 09-20-1999).] |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I've heard many stories of who she was, where she came from - the cause of much controvery it seems. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-20-1999).] |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
I must agree with Devine...all I can say is wow... Wonderful poem. Star ------------------ We are only truly apperciated after we are no more! |
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