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Michael
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0 posted 1999-09-19 09:14 PM


FALLEN STAR

If I were to fall from the sky
Would you notice me gone?
If I held your wish would still I
Be worth wishing upon?

If I fell to you, in whole, in part,
Would I land in your pocket?
Or would you place me over your heart,
Still, hidden in a locket?

Would you then gaze upon the night,
Finding it darker still,
Or would you find in me the light -
To finally make your dreams real?

When you think you're not sure how far -
The road is to tomorrow.
When you're not sure just who you are,
Cause all you feel is sorrow.

When you begin to wonder why -
Wishes never really come true.
Just remember I fell from the sky,
Because I believed in you.

[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-19-99).]

© Copyright 1999 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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1 posted 1999-09-19 09:21 PM


The night WOULD be darker as indeed would 'Passions in Poetry' be without you and your beautiful work..

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Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels.
~Isis~



caroline
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2 posted 1999-09-19 09:35 PM


Ok Michael and Femme...I want to see a book of these poems you write each other...one answering the other's poem with their own. It would be a great book! Get to work! *LOL*
Seriously...this is soooo good. The two of you write well together

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

DreamEvil
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3 posted 1999-09-19 09:49 PM


Excellently crafted and elegant verse. Your sliver of light shines brightly I think.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


moonmoon
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4 posted 1999-09-19 09:54 PM



Yep,I agree with Carolyn.... you & PFF should publish a book together & give us all free copies..
Loved it..

Michael
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5 posted 1999-09-20 12:12 PM


So, moonmoon, you & caroline wantin' pictures too?...hehe (I can arrange it)
Seriously, thank you.
You too, Isis & DreamEvil

Michael

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
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6 posted 1999-09-20 12:29 PM


Michael, I've left this one till last, because I just don't know what to say....I'm not sure how this makes me feel? Some of what it says makes me feel wonderful, and then a couple of the stanzas seem to bring me sadness...??? I've read it over at least 3 times, and am still lost.....Please help me! It's beautifully written, I must say - of course...and I love that you wrote it in response to mine......missing you tonight. *** blowing kisses as usual !!

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



Michael
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7 posted 1999-09-20 12:38 PM


Femme,
This is just saying don't let why's and what if's remove the luster of a star within your reach. If you are one of the lucky persons who catch their falling star - don't hide it in your pocket and wonder why your world is still dark. Let it shine as bright as it can in your life, into your tomorrows.
Too many people never realize their own dreams & wishes for their own fears. I've realized mine in you, I hold you up to the world as the shining star of my life. Not meant to bring you sadness, love, but to erase any doubt. The last line simply means I'd give all up for you if that was your wish, a star never to shine again without you.

Michael



[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-20-99).]

poetFemmeFatale
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8 posted 1999-09-20 01:27 PM


Oh Michael....come here and let me hold you. (arms open) I just want to hold you forever....thank you for saying what you just said, it makes things quite a bit clearer now. I know I tend to be a bit timid at times with this thing they call love and all.....I think alot of us here can relate. Too afraid to believe my dreams could come true with you. Please hold me ......& thank you.

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale




[This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 09-20-1999).]

desperado
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9 posted 1999-09-20 03:50 PM


micheal - I thought this was great and I really thought your explanation of it was wonderful. kudos on a great job. perhaps I'll post that poem that is in my mind today. I've only got ten minutes or so. think I can do it? hehe
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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10 posted 1999-09-20 05:19 PM


What a wonderful resoponse to Poet's a "star in my pocket" very nicely done. I can see two stars shining brightly for each other

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 1999-09-20 05:19 PM


Sorry about the double post here, darn enter button

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 09-20-1999).]

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
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12 posted 1999-09-20 06:59 PM


I agree with Caroline.....abook is a must.....this love affair that we are privy to watch grow is so beautiful; I can hardly wait for your next poems and posts.............

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

poetFemmeFatale
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13 posted 1999-09-25 01:04 AM


I'm bringing this one back, because it makes me feel the closest to you...since you've explained to me what it all means. You are certainly my star - I hold you out as a light to guide me through the night, like a lantern. Thank you for believing in me, and understanding my love for you...I nearly lost the brightest thing in my life, but you still shine bright in my lift today ! With all my love....Gennifer
I'll be near you again soon, my love. *** kisses ***

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



Nan
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14 posted 1999-09-25 10:25 AM


I'll bring it back up again - It's great - Of course, I expect nothing less from Michael...
Starith
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15 posted 1999-09-25 12:32 PM


Beautiful as usual. I am so happy for you both!

Femme: I do know what you mean about being afraid to believe that all your dreams lie in one person...it is very scary indeed. But love over comes!

Hugs for you both.

Star

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!


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