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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Standing at a crossroad Ragged dreams in hand Looking left, then right To mountains or to sand? ~~~*~~~ Indecision keeps her rooted Pride destroys her fate Behind her she still hears The sad song of her mate ~~~*~~~ A passing hand is offered Then drawn back in fear A fleeting hope approaches But floats away in tears ~~~*~~~ She sits down on her baggage Both roads still in view She thinks about which path to take Not knowing which to choose ~~~*~~~ As the eastern sun moves to west She takes the path back home Scars packed in her suitcase She's better off alone ~~~*~~~ caroline 1999 all rights reserved ~~~*~~~ ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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juanita Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 68Los Angeles, CA, USA |
Caroline, you are good!... Great imagery, you had me feeling I was right by the road. The sentence: Scars packed in her suitcase. very original. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is masterfully written....BRAVO!!!!! ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
another Bravo Caroline.....what a great read!! ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Thank you Juanita, Hoot, and Pepper. Your hearts are kind.  ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is very good (and sad - I wanted her to go west!), Caroline. I could see her standing there, suitcase at the ready. I like the format too...the stanza breaks give this poem a unique look.  |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Thank you Ms. deVine. She is trying to let go of that suitcase, but I think it may have grown to her hand. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Caroline, Sad but beautiful. I really liked this one. You put me there. Tyson |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Your work is all truly exceptional - but considering that I have my suitcase in hand at the moment, this one is particularly appropriate for me today... |
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