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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
Rising above the tangled overgrowth, she surveys stormy skies above, the lush vegetation beneath her. Higher she climbs, higher, looking. She spies the river which leads to the falls and the pool of her youth.Now she's gliding toward the thundering tower of water and the stillness just beyond. The dark river radiates coolness while the falls encompass the surrounding greenery with mist. She floats into the treeline and, with a grace undeniably hers alone, alights on the branch. The branch cradle of her birth. The cycle completed, her burden loosed, she dips and swoops toward the curtain, the ever-moving wall. Searching for something, someplace she's not been before.To the left, an opening appears and she darts in with a flutter. It's there that she falls to the moist floor of the cavern, and allows her once beautiful, now ragged, yet majestic wings to droop for the last time. She is complete. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
This is beautiful. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I enjoyed this  ~X~ ------------------ "We have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night" (Tombstone epitaph of two amateur astronomers) |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
DBM, I love this, it is beautiful, wistful....**sigh** ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
very nice piece of prose, D.B. A very enjoyable read...profound finish. Michael |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Very beautiful David. I feel she was waiting for the right place to be reborn... Enoyed very much CT Jenny Lee |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
Thank you everyone, I actually enjoyed writing this, not painful at all. I'm really glad you liked it, really. DB smiling widely. DB ------------------ And the men who hold high places Must be the ones who start To mold a new reality Closer to the heart. ===RUSH=== |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Very much good...I liked this...my only regret is that it was so short...  |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very beautiful indeed! I echo Christopher.....I wanted this piece to go on and on .......extremely good writng here Deep Blue Me...... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 11-17-1999).] |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
Thanks C and P! I can never tell about my own stuff. I only know if it expresses what I wanted it to, not if it is bad. DB ------------------ And if the band you're in starts playin' different tunes, I'll see you on the dark side of the moon. ==P. Floyd== |
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