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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York 
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The air was thick and sweaty from the afternoon heat in the dark cupboard at Ray's house, the jars of peanut butter were boiling over creating a nutty scented puddle on the top shelf. Inside the refridgerator the pickle people were preparing their troops, the time was right. It was time for war between the pickle people of fridge land and the cracker people of cupboard country. Love, |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
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It's a good idea, but it's too short. For instance, what are they fighting about? How will they fight? |
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