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littlewing
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0 posted 2003-03-08 03:25 AM



. . . The constant wailing of the firehouse siren did not scare me, no.  Not even the screams of the firetrucks as they hastily abandoned their refuge in the fire station at the top of our street.  In the distance, an ambulance joins the wailing of the sirens sounding like one sick melody.  No, none of this frightens me at all.  In fact, I welcome the noise.  The noise means that help is on the way.  As long as I know that help is on the way, I will be okay.  I can hold out a little bit longer.  The louder the sirens become, the less I concentrate on the fact that I cannot breathe.  I cannot breathe and my chest is full of fire.  Hot, burning coals inside of my lungs.  My God, I am too young to be feeling this way!  The cars draw near on our small, city street as people gather to see what is going on.  Droves of them.  The people.  All coming from their doorways, standing on their porches.  Waiting to see what tragedy has befallen their precious street this April evening.  My husband looks me in the eye and utters painfully, "This is all for you . . . "      

. . . my throat is burning, I am choking, My God, I am choking!    Unseen hands grip their fingers around my throat, slowly cutting the passage of air into my lungs.  Tingling begins in my fingers and travels through my entire body ending at the tips of my toes. Someone is standing on my chest, Dear God, it feels like a dozen cinderblocks have been placed there.  I make my way down the staircase, double vision.  My throat is closing up and I struggle to gasp for air.  I feebly stumble into the living room and whisper to my husband, "911, call 911."  Oh Lord - help him to comprehend.  Make him understand that I am dying!  Thick, putrid air surrounds me, air my lungs quickly reject.  I dash to our back step and run outside.  Somehow I believe that the air outside is better.  For stability, I grab onto the porch railing.  Gasping and choking, like a fish out of its element, I pray, "God, help me."  The sirens.  I can hear the sirens.  Thank you, God - in the distance I can hear the wailing of the firehouse siren . . . "      


© Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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1 posted 2003-03-08 03:37 AM



I know this should be in prose - but somehow felt everyone can relate to this in one way or another - so forgive me for rambling . . .  

icequeen
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2 posted 2003-03-08 07:43 AM


You're right. I can certainly relate to this - especially on one of those nights when I never go to sleep! LOL
I've had a couple of panic attacks that felt like this. I don't get them very often, hope you don't either!
Nice ramble

the only man worth your tears will never make you cry

inkedgoddess
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3 posted 2003-03-08 07:58 AM


and the firemen, gotta love them, come to rescue you with their big hoses, loved this
ive had those fantasies too, girlfriend
like your stuff

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-03-08 09:23 AM


Ice - thank you - yes TG they are not like that anymore

lol @ Michele - hahahaha - nice fantasy indeed!  xxoo

Albert J. Allie
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5 posted 2003-03-08 09:27 AM



a definite check!

littlewing
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6 posted 2003-03-08 09:29 AM


Thanks Albert - will catch ya next time around xxoo
Poet deVine
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7 posted 2003-03-08 12:16 PM


Did the husband do something to the wife? Why the comment 'this is all for you'? I like this but want more I guess.
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8 posted 2003-03-08 02:48 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Sue, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I am relieved that the fire trucks made it there as this was such a heartwrenching write! (sigh) This is wonderful and deserving of a vote, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2003-03-08 03:50 PM


I am like Sharon (actually wished for more of the story), but glad you gave what you did as it was really good.

           
R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin  

littlewing
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10 posted 2003-03-11 04:41 AM


Thank you Poet - Noah and Mysteria - means a lot to me that you read xxoo
Enchantress
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11 posted 2003-03-11 06:17 PM


Wow!!  Excellent..has my vote!!
~Hugs~

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And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

littlewing
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12 posted 2003-03-16 01:38 PM


Thanks Enchantress - makes me happy you have read xxoo
garysgirl
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13 posted 2003-03-16 02:18 PM


Sue, I'm like the others who said they wanted to know more. I think that proves how good it is. I hope it makes it in the book. It has my vote...

Hugs,
Ethel

littlewing
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14 posted 2003-03-16 05:50 PM


Thanks Ethel - its actually the first page of my novel (feeble attempt at one anyhow) so just look to the horror shelves right beside Stephen King for this baby . . . TY
xxoo

Jason Lyle
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15 posted 2003-03-18 11:01 PM


Very good start for your novel, well done, i'm voting.
Jason

littlewing
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16 posted 2003-03-19 12:04 PM


thanks Jason - means so very much to me truly xxoo
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17 posted 2003-03-20 04:14 PM


I'm ready for that book. LOL This is great!
littlewing
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18 posted 2003-03-21 03:07 AM


thanks suthern for reading and the book - hehe - one day  . . .  TY
Darkfire k'Sheyna
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19 posted 2003-03-21 09:35 PM


Wow, I liked it! Parts were a little unclear, however- like the others suggested, perhaps you could add a little more to clarify it a bit? But otherwise, it was really quite good!
littlewing
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20 posted 2003-03-21 10:37 PM


Dark - I left it to the imagination - TY for reading - xxoo (if you look in open - there is an explanation)
Lighthousebob
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21 posted 2003-03-23 11:36 AM


I think that this prose is evidence that you are a fine young writer and that you've captured your reading audience in your suffering (panic attack as you described it) very well. I could especially feel the euphoria of hearing the responding sirens. Always euphoric, I think, to know that help and/or hope is on the way when one is suffering or dying. In conclusion, very well written, God bless, congratulations for being accepted into the Anthology, and Best of Wishes and writing Inspiration on your writing your new novel.

-Bob

littlewing
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22 posted 2003-03-23 06:03 PM


Bob - how very sweet of you!  Thank you - I feel so at home here - your words have touched me deeply

Bless Your Heart xxoo

Lighthousebob
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