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the start of some experimentation in prose
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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Im sorry this is an eyesoar, when I paste it dosent ident or space paragraphs for some reason Looking back, I never had any use for other people’s words. An odd circumstance considering I was such a fan of my own. Somewhere along the line, I gave up on listening and instead decided to fabricate the personalities of others deep within my head to the point where even I didn’t know I was doing it. I assume that most of my fabrications came from appearance. Those who looked comforting to me I made to be my friends, those who were threatening my enemies. It was all so simple. That is until the day when my world of fabrication and the security that I had worked so hard to build came crashing down around me. It’s quite a shock when you wake up from a dream that you didn’t know you were having. Last week for me was no exception. It started out like any other; I was busy pretending to be happy with my commercial life and my commercial possessions when I came out of my euphoric state for a brief second to hear: “Can I see you in my office please?” At my company, this statement might as well have been grab a box. I’m pretty sure this is when I began to come out of my self-educed coma. The quaint cubicles of yesterday began misshaping themselves into prison cells as I passed. The soft felt walls hardening to brick and bars. The eyes of my co-workers searching for a last glimpse of me, like inmates watching a man on death row. Three miles later I reached my bosses office. After swallowing in hopes to push my heart back down from my throat I managed out a few words, “what is it you need Mike?” [This message has been edited by Kevin (edited 02-09-2001).] |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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This is a wonderful first prose attempt. You have some great thoughts. The only advice I would offer is to extend the story a little... don't leave us hanging! Keep practicing!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
wasnt finished...just trying something new  |
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