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timothysangel1973

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0 posted 2005-06-06 02:11 AM

Ok, I have written a Cantos that is broken into 6 parts

Part 1 - 12 stanzas of 4-5 lines

Part 2 - 13 stanzas of 4 lines

Part 3 - 9 stanzas of 4 lines

Part 4 - 12 stanzas of 4 lines

Part 5 - 7 stanzas of 4 lines

Part 6 - 5 stanzas of 4 lines

My question?

Where should I post it?

I thought about posting in open, and only posting 1 cantos at a time, and then letting everyone know that the bottom what cantos was next and so on until the end.

Would it make it in open with that kind of length?

And? I don't think really that it is prose because it is in a poetic form, with rhyme here and there and almost a melody in places, and no dual conversation with the exception of a few places...

Taking suggestions... as I really want to share this one, I have been working on it for nearly 2 weeks.

Thanks,
Tima

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1 posted 2005-06-06 06:40 AM

How about Critical Analysis?

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2 posted 2005-06-06 10:16 AM

Personally, I would probably post the whole thing as a single thread. I don't ascribe to the "short attention span" theory currently popular on the Internet and see absolutely nothing wrong with longer works. If you capture the reader early, I believe they'll read a lengthy poem just as readily as they would read six shorter ones. And the single thread is probably easier to follow for most?

On the other hand, there's also nothing wrong with posting multiple poems and linking each to the others as a series. I think this is most appropriate when each poem can stand on its own, but all nonetheless revolve around a single theme. FWIW, the new software will allow the creation of Collections to expressly fill this need. Until it's ready, however, I think forward and backward links within each thread would be fine.

timothysangel1973

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3 posted 2005-06-06 11:18 AM

Ok, so post them all back to back, and then add a link "back" for the previous stanza, and a link "forward" for the next stanza?

I just didn't want to load Open without permission

Thanks Ron & Sunshine

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4 posted 2005-06-06 11:24 AM

Linking "back" is going to be all you can do in some instances, Tina, because of the cut-off time you have to "edit" originating posts. But you can add links 1, 2, 3 to the "fourth" post, etc.

For example, Lady in White did that this way...
/pip/Forum51/HTML/001955.html

Maybe that helps?

timothysangel1973

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5 posted 2005-06-06 12:26 PM

Thank you Sunshine for the explanation - however her links are no longer valid ones.. is that because they were moved, or archived? I guess if I post really quickly then I can link them all together. However, what if most people here are like Ron and don't mind reading a longer poem. Shoot, perhaps when I am done with this final edit I will just post it all. Anyone that knows me knows that I NEVER post anything this long, and if I do... then I have darn good reason

Ok, another question for the pros hehe

In my Cantos, I have the stanzas as you know and then in ceratin parts I want there to be a pause in the wording for instance

lalalala - lalalalalalalalalalalallala - lalalalalalalalalalalala - lalala

Now, is it better to use (-) or just to double space the pauses?

Thanks in advance for opinions

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6 posted 2005-06-06 01:49 PM

Well, certainly the links worked when the poem was not archived, so I don't know the why behind them not working now.  You would think they would work just fine.  May have to have Ron look into that.

As far as a long poem - I don't mind reading long poems, myself.

Now, as for             pauses...
I think just giving s  p  a  c  e       between your words

or a few lines
separating them...

may do the trick.

timothysangel1973

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7 posted 2005-06-06 01:57 PM

thank you Sunshine for your help... I have edited and edited and did I say edited hehe this poem....

I think that the breaks in between words look better than all them dashes, its kinna like overkill when there are so many, yet a need in spaces

Will be posting soon

Thanks again for your help

Tima

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8 posted 2005-06-06 02:09 PM

Here is a line that I am having trouble with...

quote:
thelast line has been SUNG, SUNG for you

should that be sung, sung for you, or sang, sang for you?

It sounded right when I wrote it, yet it looks weird now.. I do beleive that I have been staring at this thing for too long

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9 posted 2005-06-06 02:14 PM

Hard to determine without seeing more of the poem itself.

Walk away from the poem for at least 24 hours - come back with fresh eyes...

timothysangel1973

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10 posted 2005-06-06 02:59 PM

Thanks Sunshine... I think that I have it fixed now. Will post as soon as I can...

thanks for all the replies to my crazy questions lol

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11 posted 2005-06-06 03:02 PM

With "has been," I believe sung would be correct.

timothysangel1973

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12 posted 2005-06-06 03:05 PM

Thanks Not A Poet.. I did decide just to leave it as "sung" because I am speaking of past tense in that sentence.. and I cannot walk away I want to finish this one.

Thanks again all

Tima

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13 posted 2005-06-06 09:33 PM

Ok, its in open... if it doesn't get any responses and keeps falling due to what I assume is "short attention span syndrome" as Ron stated... then possibly I can get someone to move it for me to somewhere that it will actually get read.

Thanks,
Tima

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