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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA 
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Over The Sewing Box My mother sat quietly, humming tranzene hymns from a well worn book, The Book Of Job (this is yours) counting stitches per inch stretched taut to hold, doubled at stress points for durability worn long past prime. My mother, a salt and pepper shadow hunched, squinting in yellow light, pulled tired thread through frayed cloth and called it mending. ~haze 11/22/99 >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Mending I learned to love threading myself through sharpened stainless steel traditions contradictions I learned while passing smoothly as guided silk a wisp woven effortlessly knotted a finely stitched patch to tattered cloth Unraveled spool through fingers bloodied by pricking points I learned to mend. ~haze 11/22/99 |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Haze, either I am getting to like and understand "free verse" much better, or both of these poems are exceptional. I just wanted to say they are beautifully done and wonderfully thought-provoking. Thanks Philip |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I enjoyed the first one very much -- some very nice imagery there. The second one didn't hold my attention as well though. I wonder if you got caught in the alliteration and forgot to give us the picture there. Or maybe I just don't get it. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
I preferred the second because the way I interpreted it seemed to relate to my own experiences of navigating through some of the tediously narrow and sharply regimented British conventions and traditions. It becomes almost an art in itself to pass through the obstacles without snagging them. And yes you learn through making painful mistakes. LOL ... I have no idea whether this is what you were writing about Haze ... but that's how it came across to me ... C'mon now .. spill the proverbial beans Philip |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Mother knows best... what mother wants.. eh? |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
how funny, I really hate actual mending....will let it pile up and finally buy something new rather than mend....but your first poem really touched me.....sigh....and yep, we are all mothers at one time or another....mending.....sigh.... not sure about the second, I don't see myself like that....but your poem makes me wonder and look deeper....good writing on both  |
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