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Insomnolence |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563
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Its charisma calls to her, she chases it up and down dark empty streets, as it slips and slides behind, in front of her, getting close enough to grasp, turning, vanishing before fluttering eyelids; she imagines its teasing, taunting laughter as it evades her so skillfully, when suddenly, face to face, it grabs her, swiftly carrying her away. Not long and they begin, The dreams that visit Without fail, always the same, Enigmatic, bewildering, no longer terrifying until the morning triggers them in memory; the sun finds few small spaces to enter now, she has smeared these dreams across the windows in vain attempts to see them in the light of day. "It is wisdom to know others; |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hi Kris, I like the way you have tied the words together here but I think my imagination is a little short today. I can't seem to guess where this is going. For some reason I feel like I am trying to make it more complicated than you intended, like it really is simple but over my head. All I get is the conflict of reality and fantasy. Try to help me out a little here, please. I'm starting to feel inadequate. Thanks, Pete |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Kris, How ya doin'? Um, don't suppose you could drop some of those 'ing' words?  Brad |
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Ven Member
since 2001-10-01
Posts 102U.K. |
This conjures up some good images, agree with what was said about the "ing" words though. |
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