Critical Analysis #1 |
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The Afterwards |
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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
I see you standing from afar, and run to greet you where you are Now I look into those eyes forget all the tears we've cried I'm exstatic, overjoyed all those times of pain are void This is US!! This is real!! My grip on your hands says how I feel I cant, I wont, I'll never let go a life without you? I can not know We're an us, we're together we'll be hand in hand forever [This message has been edited by PiXiEpUnKeR (edited 06-08-2001).] |
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Sundown Junior Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 16does it really matter? |
this has potential to be a good poem, but the first stanza could really use some work, it really doesn't fit in with the rest if the poem... |
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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
Actually the 1st stanza is supposed to describe the feeling that they couple is having now that they can be together... the have been through a lot of tough times, and the rest of the poem describes the afterwards of a particular tough time... |
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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
how's that sound? Give me some ideas?! |
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