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PiXiEpUnKeR
Junior Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 49
IL, USA

0 posted 2001-06-07 11:53 PM

Tangled fingers
laughing faces
exchanging whispers
in wide open spaces

Blushing cheeks
caressed lips
wiping away
any tears that slip

Together again
a reunion long kept
hours to make up
for the hours we've wept

Everlasting love
surviving souls
a bond stronger
then anyone can know

Giggling voices
holding tight
pain relieved
with a well deserved night

No one can touch us
relaxation and rest
together forever
here comes the best

jenni
Member

since 1999-09-11

Posts 478
Washington D.C.

1 posted 2001-06-12 07:06 PM

pixiepunker--

i thought this was pretty cute.

the fourth stanza was maybe a little cliched (ok, VERY cliched, sorry, lol), but i really liked the first stanza (especially "exchanging whispers / in wide open spaces") and "giggling voices / holding tight."

very nice!

thanks for posting this for us,

jenni

KirstyOHara
New Member

since 2001-06-07

Posts 9
Australia

2 posted 2001-06-12 08:44 PM

Hi there.

I like this poem simply because it is cute and simple.

"Always kiss your children goodnight"

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