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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
when i go to hell i want virgil's job i want to be a virtuous heathen how no matter how good they were it was not enough the kind red spirits are demons how can you be so conscienceless, without an angel perched on your cartoon shoulder?? could you be any colder? right now i can feel how worthless it ALL is "seeping out on to the screen" yes, you too yes everything and if virgil won't hand over his position i want to be somewhere near judecca no matter how hard i tried it was not enough now the kindred spirits are demons "Faith means not wanting to know what is true." Nietzsche |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Roxane, This a very powerful and angry piece. So much so, that as the reader, I feel as if I am the intended recipient. You have very effectively depicted a personality at "turning point", who has an extremely jaded and fatalistic attitude. Sort of a spiritual commentary on how souls are finally lost, or pushed, over to the "dark side". I really liked the entire poem. Billy  "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Impressive roxane Some minor things... - typo in line four - I think capital I's read better than little ones..but that is my personal op - I think you need a comma between kind and red 'how can you be so conscienceless, without an angel perched on your cartoon shoulder?? could you be any colder?' This is good...but I'd dump one of the question marks after cartoon shoulder. I'm not familiar with Judecca (gasp lol) - can you explain that? It sounds nice and mysterious...I like it... I'm not sure about the last line...I think it might be overstating... nice piece of work, roxane..  KAll obscurity starts with a danger: |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great piece..nicely written..also very powerful..thanks for sharing roxane..  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
judecca is a region in dante's inferno where betrayal against a benefactor was punished. thanks for the replies. |
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