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Visions of Immortality

Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

0 posted 2001-02-02 10:29 AM

I have wandered this Earth for millenia
Seeking the son of one
And now I see what no soul means to me
I saw Rome rise and fall
I saw man escape disaster again and again
I beheld the Birth of the demons dream
And the Death of angels over and again
The rise to power
And the fall from grace
watched the wheels turn
As times went by in the eternal game

Sat on the shoulders of the great
Seen the stabbed backs of the bold
And still the world turns
I who have done so much
I who have seen such things
I who have learned nothing
In my quest to stop not growing old
I have seen broken hearts of gold
And beautiful tales left untold
Are these the things in which we enfold
Is love left out in the cold

Look at this Jigsaw that is life
The four pillars forming and reforming.
Always the same always changing
look deep into yourself
the double helix that is you
there resides the true name of God
He that is before everything
He that will exist in the abyss
Man lives in his dreams
And through his dreams he will be freed
These are the truths i have seen

Every place has been my home
yet my imprint I leave in none
To the heavens and hells of men i've been
The darkness and the light are clear
Still the pit of another new year
Shatters the brilliant suns beams
Ah for such things is a world made
For the beautiful song of the dying swan
Or the lonely goodbye lost on a summer breeze
Oh what wonders I have seen
In a world never meant for the likes of me

They gathered to me at Tripoli
As I spoke of majesty undone
they spoke of me at Normandy
long after the last battle was won
Yet the young soon forget
As old they did get with sons of their own
And who would remember me, not one
"Not I" they say "Now your time is gone"
Still the road is my home
As I pass from new into old
As another cycle begins in the world

Who is the man I see as I walk
by the road in a window
seeing as the others see
looking as the others look
Yet in him is the variable
The butterfly the random event
in the patterns on the paper
A single piece of chaos in a chaotic world
different for all his sameness
same for all his differences
Perhaps it is he I seek yet i cannot find

I stare at another moonlit night
At a fog covered bay
Such a beauty to behold
As the sun gently ushers in the day
and a bird of red and gold cuts the sky
and the chorus of the reeds sing sweet lullabies
Not all can be truely lost
even on a one as travelled as I
the air tinted by cherry blossom
I see the beauty in the night
As the kaleidescope of day sweeps across the sky

Alone the Journey through lives
Yet on stormy nights
As the thunder claps
And the lightning brightens burning light
I hear the footsteps
Of him the one before
Or perhaps it is the other
he that is yet to be me
In all the long days
My mind games it plays
And I await my redemption.

Many a time, Many a place
I am touched by eternity
its tears on my face
And the wind continues to blow
Man continues in his time
I am sat outside in the long cold
In the long, long night
in my eternal way
apart from the man i stand
Trapped with him i will stay
Day and Day and Day

Truths i have forsaken
Memorys i lack for none
yet my jouneys unbroken
In my search for the son of None
He that lives in a dream of death
An end to my wandering life
To me an end to my misery to my strife
I who came before
Who once did touch his hand
Who long ago lived as man
who tended and tilled the land.

Now i have lived and i have lived
and i have seen and have seen
what was before will be again
and what has never been
My memories i leave to dust
My hope my death and screams
the pain ive felt
the blows ive dealt
to protect that i cant redeem
yet still i watch the visions
for sight of him to see

The very deep did rot: O Christ!
That ever this should be!
Yea, slimy things did crawl with legs
Upon the slimy sea.

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 2001-02-06 03:03 PM

You've definitely caught the meandering feel here but, to be honest, I couldn't get that Rolling Stones song out of my head as I read this.

I wonder what would happen if you dropped the 'I' here?

Just an opinion,
Brad

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