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Purple Room |
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mere enigma Junior Member
since 2001-01-29
Posts 18 |
engulfed in an enormous wave of purple pain and pleasure crushing and caressing me holding and tossing me gasping and inhaling lungfuls of salty sweaty water choking yet existing fleeing and persisting I still taste your sadness on my lips Smell your struggle on my skin Touch your madness in my breast see your heart in my reflection hear your thoughts in my whisper sense your presence in my motion Did we Compose the beginning Of a symphony of exquisite colors? Did we free you from your pain? Or did we bind you with promises you wish to escape? Did we torture you with feathers and nails? Entice you with evil deeds Sell your soul without permission Touch your silence Without consent In the purple room The nymph and the vixen The secret enigma Dancing on a yellow grave Scattering seeds of fire Watered with streams of anguish Swimming in purple prose Flying through azure haze On the horizon of your reality In the purple room |
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sylphid Junior Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 30 |
In the purple room I find in the first pargraph (crush & caress, hold & toss, gasp & inhale, choke& exist….. ) amazing to picture.. in the second you gathered all senses (taste, smell touch and see and hear) in motion in the third(the puzzle for all to figure , we, you it’s an obvious trio) what have you done? in the fourth you could lose someone in your names and colors and actions (nymph, vixen, secret, enigma)( yellow, purple, haze and azure) )(dance, fly and swim, water and scatter) loved it …. but really Not fair my dear friend, my enigma For all not to know the conspiracy , the scenario script Behind the real intentions, tell all that yellow grave has lost his glory now And that reality was never an objection anyhow But tell me first who is ( your reality ) in the last paragraph? what does your desires wish to fulfill? And when feelings do take action ? And while watching your Seeds grow in all directions Composing colors for all to feel One why and where to, is the my only question…? Welcome mere, |
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mark woolard Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 143 |
hey, enigma! this is pretty cool! i totally enjoy the flow and motion of this poem! i sensed it immediately, and was distracted from it only a couple times. (example) "salty sweaty water" while that works as far as the flow goes, "salty sweaty" is a redundancy that caught my eye. . .kike saying the distant horizon is far away. (these ARE fun to make fun of, however!) the last stanza also struck me as odd, but i assume its because it is simply a departure from the main flowing body. . . the language here is colorful and emotionally impacting! if you don't mind me asking, what exactly does purple symbolize to you? we may have the same/different meaning. |
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mere enigma Junior Member
since 2001-01-29
Posts 18 |
Mark, Thanks for your comments! Yes, salty, sweaty is redundant- i meant it that way. Also sweaty has a dirty connotation. Purple symbolizes sensuality, luxury, and pleasure to me. The room also happened to be purple. |
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