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Learner's Permit New Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 9Australia |
Me feeling jealous, she is a friend Yes only a friend But once upon a time I love this friend We were lovers as if forever Only until one day everything shattered into a thousand of pieces That is not easy to put back together Why should I feel such jealously? I cannot imagine her being in the arms of another guy That could have been mine, what have I done wrong Deep inside me, I still love her I have one last wish, a wish to put things back together ------- this is my first poem |
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mark woolard Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 143 |
LP: not bad for your first! Keep hacking away and reading other poets. Study their style, word useage, and rhythm flow. Check out all the information on this web site, and fill as many notebooks as possible. Things will come together, man! The content, however was loud and clear. I always hated that "just friends" runaround, especially when some other dude screwed over that girl I secretly loved--why secretly? "We're just friends" |
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mark woolard Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 143 |
LP: not bad for your first! Keep hacking away and reading other poets. Study their style, word useage, and rhythm flow. Check out all the information on this web site, and fill as many notebooks as possible. Things will come together, man! The content, however was loud and clear. I always hated that "just friends" runaround, especially when some other dude screwed over that girl I secretly loved--why secretly? "We're just friends" |
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