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sexyILN
Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 29


0 posted 2000-11-20 11:51 PM



a centipede is slow
but it has one hundred legs
a cheetah has but four legs
but is very fast
the elephant has four legs as well
but is slow too
how then do we measure things
if there is no standard?
take people
for example
you can’t judge people
by anything but study
and getting to know them
and might I add
giving them a chance
to prove themselves
why is it then
that animals get a chance
to prove their speed
but people
that should be
of utmost importance
do not get a chance
to prove their
personality
their loyalty
their character?
why are people
judged by their cover
when not even books
are judged by covers?
why can people
accept others who
aren’t smart
but don’t like
anyone mentally challenged?
why?
why is life so unfair?




...peace as a primary goal, is dangerous because it implies that you will sacrifice any principle for the sake of it.... Avoiding tragedy requires a s

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OLIAS
Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa
1 posted 2000-11-22 02:35 PM


Hi sexyILN,
Reading this piece through, I think it would possibly keep the philosophy 101 forum going for a month, very thought provoking.
I feel that you are possibly using the wrong medium for this type of piece, too wordy for a poem, needing more structure, I think maybe you could expand the piece into a philosophical piece of prose, it seems to fall between two camps in its present form.
An enjoyable read though, I would be interested to read a revised version. Thank you.
Regards,
Olias

B.T.W. Welcome to C.A. I hope you enjoy it here  

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