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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
My kiss, the abyss The lost bet Oh my sour kiss The bitter lips Pucker in a scowl All the damned Arrive for it When you fail the test Beware my loving kiss Fear it as though it was death And just as cold and cruel ------------------ "Come night, come darkness, for you cannot come too soon or stay too long in such a place as this." Charles Dickens roxane [This message has been edited by roxane (edited 09-17-99).] |
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rachana.s Member
since 1999-09-16
Posts 55madras,tamil nadu,India |
For a moment, at first I was lost, but the last four lines - i liked those last four lines. they had impact. Still could you work on that starting a little bit. The picture only becomes clear as you come down. May be a description on the test could have helped?(only my opinion) rachi |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
The only thing I dislike about this poem is the title. It reminds me of Tom Jones and Prince. Everything else works very well. You've created quite the 'allure of evil','love of danger' thing in this one. Normally, I rail on the lack of detail or context in poems but here I think it actually adds to the poem. It adds to the mystery here. Good job! Brad |
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