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Marq
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since 1999-10-18
Posts 222


0 posted 2000-07-31 01:25 AM


Al Fumayle says:
'Met a hell of a fine woman
the other day....  My heart
was still in the right place --
properly in my pants,' he laughs
like he was the one that invented it.
'Still have that sneaking suspicion
that every woman is better than every
man, sure as there's a God in heaven.'
What???  Al has that way about him --
takes getting used to but he's
easy to listen to -- with effort.
Al continues to solve the situation.
'People in the female category
are always so different -- so alike....
And each contest is always uncommon
no matter the puddle the floundering
and wallowing takes place in.'
Al holds onto himself, laughing
like he just learned how
and he's making up for lost time.
Al's like that -- he has that way
about him but once you get used to it
he's easy to abide, you know,
with some effort.
Of course Al's not finished --
come to think on it, Al's never finished
which some might say is a good thing --
especially Al.
'Take for instance this hell
of a fine woman I met the other
day.  So simply complex and
just right for show and tell
or teasing on the playground....
Hell of a fine example of just
what I'm always trying to put
my finger on about people
in the female category.'


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Brad
Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
1 posted 2000-07-31 02:42 AM


Marq,
Always glad to have you posting here. This is such an interesting character study. I'll try to get back with a more in-depth view of this but I will say on the initial read, I enjoyed this very much.

Brad

Trevor
Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 700
Canada
2 posted 2000-08-01 10:33 AM


Hi Marq,

"Al Fumayle says:
'Met a hell of a fine woman
the other day....  My heart
was still in the right place --
properly in my pants,' he laughs
like he was the one that invented it.
'Still have that sneaking suspicion
that every woman is better than every
man, sure as there's a God in heaven.'
What???  Al has that way about him --"

I found it easy to get into this poem. I think we all know at least one "Al". Good opening section, the only suggestion I have is to lose the "What???", the tone of the piece is set with the other words and What??? doesn't seem to add to it.

"takes getting used to but he's
easy to listen to -- with effort.
Al continues to solve the situation.
'People in the female category
are always so different -- so alike....
And each contest is always uncommon
no matter the puddle the floundering
and wallowing takes place in.'
Al holds onto himself, laughing
like he just learned how
and he's making up for lost time."

The poem on a whole has a really good "feel" to it and this section I think has a lot to do with that.

"Al's like that -- he has that way
about him but once you get used to it
he's easy to abide, you know,
with some effort."

I liked the rep. of "with some effort".

"Of course Al's not finished --
come to think on it, Al's never finished
which some might say is a good thing --
especially Al.
'Take for instance this hell
of a fine woman I met the other
day.  So simply complex and
just right for show and tell
or teasing on the playground....
Hell of a fine example of just
what I'm always trying to put
my finger on about people
in the female category.'"

Good ending, I interpreted it as a person talking lots on a subject but in the end showing just how ignorant they are of that subject. The speaker's voice really comes through in this poem and has a consistent tone to it. I enjoyed this one Marq, thanks for the read,

Trevor



Elilas
Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 20
The Dalles, Oregon, USA
3 posted 2000-08-01 11:45 AM


I ejoyed this pome. But I do need to say that part of my life and or childhood is in the past but it still brings back memorise.  The hella fine wemon part is intregingly used is in this pome.

                          Steven


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