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jezz_micah New Member
since 2000-06-30
Posts 8 |
*Dedicated to Matthew Charron* As i sit here and think i wonder how it would be if you had stayed with me but obvioulsy it wasn't meant to be... And now i look back to the times we shared all the times we dared dared to be natural, dared to be free but obviously, it wasn't meant to be... We've spent so much time together and we're so close at one time but now that's not worth one dime so obviously it wasn't meant to be... So continue your life the way you feel it should be but obviously it wasn't meant to be... with me... published in the national library book of poetry.."98" |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I like the use of repetition but think you should focus on more concrete images rather than a description of hopes and wishes. You need to let the reader in more. Just a suggestion, Brad |
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