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mysticharm Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 189Canada 
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A Celestial Bond As another day draws near to its end, I find myself waiting with anticipation, for the day's light to be dimmed, signifying the beginning of Act II. The sun gracefully bows to her audience, while she slowly descends from the stage, making room for her majestic lover, to take his place amongst the stars. In silence, I wait for that special moment, when the two will meet and become one, a moment when each is a reflection of the other, a single moment in time, only they can share. Two perfect rings, with no beginning and no end, forever destined to spend eternity apart, individually ruling their vast domains, giving to their audiences all that they are. There is a special time, when behind a cloak of darkness, they strengthen their bond and renew their vows, we are all here to witness this special union, when there is a day without night and a night without day. |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
you've touched my heart mysticcharm... days go by without meeting but love grows with the anticipation... SincerelyA_L |
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mysticharm Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 189Canada |
That is so true  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh WOW!!!!! This is absolutley beautiful... and this... The sun gracefully bows to her audience, while she slowly descends from the stage, making room for her majestic lover, to take his place amongst the stars. LOVED IT! thanks for sharing.  Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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mysticharm Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 189Canada |
Merci pour avoir partager vos idee Dark Angel. il vient un temps dans notre vie. Quand on doit arreter etre tranquil et prendre un gros soupir.  |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
I read this a few times before deciding to comment, then decided against it. Read it again, and convinced myself that since it was posted in CA I should go ahead and comment... Sad truth is, it is a well written, lyrical and beautiful molding of cliches. I have been away for a while so many here may not know my prediliction for the abhorence of cliche - I despise them completely, and unfortunately that is what I see here. Talent like this is better served with originality... now I am off to seek out your other posts and prove to myself that you are as good as I think you are.... Sorry if I harshed your mellow... Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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mysticharm Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 189Canada |
tsk tsk tsk JP...beauty is in the eye of the beholder!!! ...I appreciate your views and am quite honored you needed to reread my poem several times to come to a final conclusion. Where ever there is a positive there must also be a negative. Never underestimate the Power of Purpose. Yesterday is history, Tomorrow is a mystery, Today is a gift, That's why it's called the 'Present' I like someone who is blunt and upfront. Keeps a person on their toes.  |
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Jeen Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 91 |
I am so new to this forum...only a couple of days...and am unqualified, but I felt comfortable commenting on another newcomer. I though it was wonderful! Jeen |
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mysticharm Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 189Canada |
Thank you Jeen I welcome your comment and you to CA. ...everyone knows what they like or dislike ...doesn't mean your more qualified or unqualified then anyone else ...just means you know what you like  |
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