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Lonelypoet Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123Conklin,NY,USA |
Friends are the people in whom we give our trust. To laugh with, or to cry with. To share the memories of the things that have happened and to have them by you when the things that will happen, happen. It doesn't matter matter who they are or what they are like to you, all that matters is that they're your friend. (dedication to: Leslie,Lisa,Megan,Liz and many more) |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
truth be told in this fine poem. Friends are friends forever. tis best to be a friend, than a friend never to have. |
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jenni Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 478Washington D.C. |
lonelypoet-- ok, this poem has a lovely sentiment, but you did post it in critical analysis, so i figure you might want some feedback beyond "this is poem with a lovely sentiment." well, there doesn't seem to be much here beyond empty phrases and cliches, awkwardly phrased at that, especially the last two sentences. and "friend" in the last line should really be plural. suggestions? unless greeting card verse is what you're trying for, try taking some or one of the qualities of friendship you state here, and showing the reader these qualities in action. jenni |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I agree with Jenni. I wonder if you might move this to Open. You might get a better response there. If you want criticism, however, could you just post a note and let us know.  If that is what you want, be prepared. Brad |
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