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Critical Analysis #1

The Man and His Poems

poeticone
New Member

since 1999-08-26

Posts 7
Redondo Beach, CA

0 posted 1999-08-26 03:47 AM

He is a man who sees poetry
In everything about him,
In the people he meets,
In the situations he faces,
In the dreams he has,
And in the life he lives.
He writes out of an instinct
That was not discovered
Until later in life,
And he writes as if
Catching up for lost time,
Seemingly afraid
That if he doesn't say
What he has to say now,
It might never be said.
He was one who knows
That life can be
Unexpectedly short,
And he is determined
To have his say
While he can.
He loves sharing
The poems he has written
Maybe more than
Anything else in life,
And whether or not
He ever achieves fame or fortune
With the words he writes
He loves what he does.
He certainly is not
One of the closet variety poets
He so often meets.
He seizes every opportunity
That comes along
To read his works
And appreciates anyone
Who cares to listen.
Perhaps the best
Audience he has ever had
Was a captive audience
Who was sick in bed,
In long term recovery
From a stroke.
He brought the world to life
With his words,
And she responded
As best she could
Which was more than enough
To let him know
That he had made a difference
And that his words
Had been heard.
For him poetry brings words to life
And gives life to those it touches.

Seaangel
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand

1 posted 1999-08-28 05:51 PM

Wow, an example for all of us to follow I think. I wish i had the guts to read my poetry to a live audience!

Wolfgang
Member

since 1999-05-24

Posts 124
Hamilton, Ont. Canada

2 posted 1999-09-04 09:06 PM

Hi poeticone.
I don't have a problem with the content or the words you have written.
I think they are quite well thought out and even a touch emotional.
I do have a problem with the structure of this piece. To me it reads like a magazine article that is trying to disguise itself as poetry. Perhaps you might try spacing and connecting some of the lines.
As I am not real great with "free verse poetry", so you may take this opinion with a grain of salt.

[This message has been edited by Wolfgang (edited 09-04-99).]

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