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7
Member

since 2000-04-26

Posts 113
Amherst, MA, USA

0 posted 2000-04-26 05:53 PM

hey y'all. basically, i just want to know if i'm getting my message across... so, if you can tell me what message you are receiving, it would be a real help. any comments and criticism are welcome as well.

thanks

7

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it burns like the sun
a fearful threat you’ve
tried to resist
and hide from its
ambiguity
it can sting
and may ruin you in
the end
but what bliss
to remember the
sting of the sun’s kiss
and to know that it has
managed to
break through

bboog
Member

since 2000-02-29

Posts 303
Valencia, California

1 posted 2000-04-26 05:58 PM

Seven~
Cute. I liked the "feel" of it.
best regards,
bboog

[This message has been edited by bboog (edited 04-26-2000).]

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