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The Day The Smiley Faces Cried
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The Day The Smiley Faces Cried |
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MelBear Junior Member
since 2000-03-26
Posts 29Imlay City, Mi |
December 29th 1999 two of my dear friends we killed in a car reck. Jessica was the closest to me.I choose to write this with smiley faces for two reasons...1) Because Jessica Loved them, 2) Because of the fact that they are so silly and Childish. We were all silly and childish untill we buried our friends. I am still healing for the loss of this dear girl and my poetry is my escape.. so I wrote her this. The day you died the smiley faces cried Tears rolled down their cheeks continuing for weeks and weeks. None of them will have a real smile for a long long while. The day you died the smiley faces cried They have no joy to spread since the day they found out you were dead. You were taken at just sweet sixteen. Smiley faces find this cruel and mean. The day you died smiley faces cried. They all question why. and they continue to cry and cry. That night in December is a night all smiley faces will remeber. Because the night you died ALL the smiley faces cried. "Death is not the end. Just a vaction (where you acan still see the world)from friends and family, in time they all follow you to your permanet vacation spot." |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
I like the line about the smiley faces crying and etc. though you must be careful not to overdo things sometimes. Please accept my sympathies. |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Mel~ I wonder if perhaps you might be able to tell us a little bit about Jessica first so that we get to know your friend a little better. What made her special? And perhaps in doing so, you'll better preserve those special memories. Perhaps this will even help you overcome her loss. So my suggestion would be to write a stanza or two about Jessica, and then add the ones about her death. To make them more interesting, I suggest that you write in the present tense. Example, Jessica loves the color pink She likes to listen to In-sync And put a smiley happy face on everythink especially when she writes to me. Hope this helps you. My sympathies go out to you and her family via this message. best regards, bboog |
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