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Critical Analysis #1

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juanita
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 68
Los Angeles, CA, USA

0 posted 1999-08-15 03:54 PM

Dissatisfied with an earlier effort, exposed to the possibilities of enlightened input, retooling and struggling just a little, my baby gives fitful birth!

Bliss

Your mind is oh, so strong!
Yet mine, so very sensitive
Your thoughts reach out to me
No matter how far
The distance may be

You, engulfed in desire
Yearning for a touch
Dreaming of some tenderness
Wondering if those feelings
In me, amount to less

Suffice it just to say
That truly, I feel blessed
If capable, this woman may be
In such an extraordinary man
Of awaking the roaring sea

Oh to have known such bliss!
May the depth of your gentle love
Cause in your thoughts, me to hold
Though reason justly prevents me
From wounding your precious soul

mister61
Junior Member

since 1999-08-12

Posts 41
bergen county, nj

1 posted 1999-08-16 06:21 PM

Very impressive - you described feelings so vividly! I don't understand part of the second to last verse, though - "If capable, this woman may be / In such an extraordinary man / Of awaking the roaring see".

juanita
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 68
Los Angeles, CA, USA

2 posted 1999-08-17 12:26 PM

Thanks for the kind words, 61
As for the cryptic 3rd verse,
There once was a boring fool
who I woke up just in time before he plain expired off the face of the earth, such an extraordinary twit!!!!

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